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Yes, I do want the story to eventually reach the more modern Marvel timeline, but I won’t write every single year slowly. The early part is slower because Jesse needs to survive, build a foundation, grow, and go through the war, but later there will be bigger time skips when it makes sense. I don’t want the story to take 1000 chapters just to reach modern Marvel. Some periods will be detailed, like 1914–1918, because they are important for Jesse’s development, but other decades can move faster with time skips, summaries, and important arcs. So yes, the plan is to eventually reach the more recognizable Marvel era, but I want Jesse’s growth before that to feel earned.

“Thanks for the feedback. I think I understand what you mean. I’ve been focusing a lot on improving the grammar, but I may have made some of the character voices too similar in the process. I’ll try to balance both better from now on: cleaner writing, but with each character keeping their own personality and way of speaking. I’m glad the plot is still something you’re looking forward to, and I appreciate the honest criticism.”

Thanks for the feedback. I understand what you mean. Some recent chapters leaned too much into long dramatic sentences and cryptic phrasing, and that can make the writing feel artificial. I’ll try to make the prose more natural again, with clearer scenes, more grounded dialogue, and less over-stylized narration. The story is still meant to be slow and character-focused, but I agree the style needs to feel more human and less like it is trying too hard.

His English should already be mostly functional now. He may still sound strange because Portuguese is his native language and he uses modern expressions, but he shouldn’t sound completely broken anymore. I’ll adjust that going forward.

That’s fair criticism. Some of the early chapters made Jesse look less capable than I intended, especially compared to Tommy, Nora, Whitcomb, and Hensley. Jesse is not supposed to be stupid; he has modern education, future knowledge, and a different way of thinking. He should make mistakes, but he also needs to learn from them and become more proactive. For skills like Basic Calculation, the idea is not that he didn’t know basic math before. It is more about applying math quickly in 1910s money, trade, ledgers, margins, interest, measurements, and real business situations without modern tools. I should make that clearer. The daily gacha is also still happening, but most rolls are common items, useless objects, small coins, food, or minor progress, not major skills every day. I’ll start showing more weekly/monthly summaries so the system feels consistent.

Hey, thanks for the feedback. Could you tell me what exactly made the story feel uninteresting to you? Was it too slow, the pacing, the plot, or something else? Also, could you explain why you think the MC is an idiot? I’m trying to portray him as someone inexperienced, scared, and still adapting to a completely different time period, but I’d like to understand what made him feel dumb to you so I can improve it. Any specific criticism would help me a lot.

The MC’s original language is Brazilian Portuguese, so he is still slowly learning English throughout the story. As for romance, yes, I do have interest in adding romance later on, but I don’t want to force it too early. For now, I want to focus more on Jesse surviving, growing, learning, and adapting to the world around him. For possible love interests, some characters I’m interested in using later are Emma Frost and Magik, along with maybe other characters connected to mutants, magic, or the more supernatural side of Marvel. But I don’t want to fully confirm everything yet, because some things may change as the story develops. I also don’t want to turn the story into something focused only on romance or add too many girls at once. If romance happens, I want it to feel natural and fit Jesse’s development and the plot.

I’m giving my own story **5 stars**, because, just like many shameless authors have already done here, I’m going to do the same lol. Jokes aside, I really hope you’re enjoying the fanfic so far. I’m still improving as a writer and learning more and more about how to develop the writing, the characters, the worldbuilding, and the pacing of the story. My goal is to build everything slowly, without making the protagonist overpowered out of nowhere, showing him surviving, evolving, and adapting to this universe in a more natural way. I know I still have a lot to improve, but I’ll keep working hard to make each chapter better than the last. Thank you so much to everyone who is reading, following, commenting, and supporting the story. I hope you continue to enjoy Jesse’s journey and everything that is still to come.

I find the question a little funny, but I really like Iron Man—a pretty cliché choice, if you know what I mean.

I work in an office; we had a small setback and I lost some time to release more chapters.