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An OK read. Dialouges feel a bit weird(you could describe it as abrupt?). I'd be happier if the whole System thing didn't exist and he would actually struggle a bit replicating the Mangas not perfectly with the tools of the world. Would make it more interesting instead of just him pumping out whole Volumes in mere hours.

1.Please don't let any enemy escape this fight. Honesty would kinda undermine Scatach and the Kaleidoscope magic. 2. Make it a quick fight. No need for 3+ chapters of "boring" fight scene. The are incredible hard to describe in any other form than visual. Especially supernatural ones where in this case technically every reaction should happen in less than milliseconds. How do you really want to bring this in a written form and not butcher it somehow? And don't tell me Kokabiel could really put up a fight against someone like Susanno. Thanks for writing so far