Death_Scythe

Average at best, so many things he did and so many things happened but the result is that it's just the same in the canon, what's the point of getting reincarnated and almost half of the story currently dedicated to his training and mastering jutsus and he can't change a damn thing in the story to makes this more interesting. Felt like the story will stay the same him being below the the OG strong characters and he will do nothing about it but hide and flaunts his fuckin careful, cowardly, and "i dont want relationships in this ninja world because it can get me killed" nature. I bet the story will go the same as the canon but we will have the MC training and training again and again and still find himself inferior of the strong OG characters, so author can have the reason to continue doing this routine again and again until this story goes from outer space. 🤷‍♂️

THAT'S THE GOAL!! TO BE AT THE TOP! what's so hard for that to understand? you keep saying it's ambition, it's only an ambition if he didn't reach it but he's the MC of the story for sure he will become the strongest nen user, just because he didn't said it directly it doesn't mean he didn't have a goal. What's your dream or ambition? to be the strongest in the world. that's a goal right? if you successfully become one but if you didn't then it's only an ambition, see the simple logic?

First of all, i didn't said they should be like Akatsuki, what i said is that they should have a goal instead of doing anything like in the original because the author said they should be a Troupe like? so what's the real Phantom Troupe? doing anything they like, killing innocents, for money, for everything. They lacked the ideology, they're just a group of criminals who doesn't care about what they do and the founding members are loyal to their leader, simple as that. Second, about the things you said for the incoming arcs, remember this is still 12 yrs ago prior to the Yorknew City Arc considering this is a Phantom Troupe centric fanfic the author can't just do a big timeskip because that will not make sense, so the incoming arcs like Yorknew and Chimera will be in much later part of the novel.

I understand your point too but this is fanfiction, well although yours is technically a fanfiction aside from having adding an OC, what's the difference between the original story and your work? I know Troupe is Troupe if they act like Troupe but wouldn't that be repetitive? because you said they need to be Troupe, so that means you're just going to repeat what they did in the original story with just a little bit of twist that MC is part of the group and a vice leader. You know since this 12 yrs before the plot in Yorknew City, there's just so much potential in your work. This is just my personal opinion brother, i still appreciate your work keep it up!

I thought this would be more interesting Phantom Troupe than the original one. Looks like they're just another group takes everything they want and want nothing taken away from them. Personally, i think this would be more interesting if they have an agenda like Akatsuki and other villain groups, probably the only thing i can expect in this story is about all killing, stealing, killing and stealing again until they reach the main plot of the OG story. Welp, each to their own i guess.

a minor leaguer in his last life looking forward to a high schooler to teach him about pitching lol

Well it's possible to have 5 pitchers in a team but the point is that they must all be first string players (the main team). That's why i said earlier aside from there's too many pitchers, there's also only 3 slots left for the first string. That's why it's hard to make a great DNA fanfiction especially a self insert pitcher since the team has only limited slots unless you want make it in another era like Rei same year with Yuuki, Chris and others (the 3rd years in original) or Rei same with Miyuki or Rei with another team. Adding a pitcher in the same year with Sawamura and Furuya will make the Seidou team full of pitchers but can't use all of them. Sawamura, Rei, Kawakami, Tanba (ace) and Furuya that's 5 pitchers and i don't know how will you distribute the playing time.

lol Seidou without Sawamura is like One piece without Luffy, he's the MC for a reason and their future ace, him not playing competitive for his whole first year means slower progression, no yips arc results into a weaker Sawamura. Well, it's your story man, your story your choice.

i mean you have no choice there since Miyuki will be the one who will be the main catcher. Chris is already injured and won't play in his last year, so i don't know how can you make a battery with him, the only time Rei can make battery with Chris are games in friendly matches or training. Unless you make Chris never got injured but that will make Miyuki as a reserve catcher since the main catcher can be only one. Also there's a thing about the first string, at the moment there are only 3 slots left originally that was taken by Sawamura, Furuya and Haruichi but since Rei (MC) is in Seidou you need to make an adjustment there. P.S Chris isn't in first string since he is injured.

then most likely it will be a mess since there's too many pitchers and also making a battery with Chris it means that Sawamura will practice with other catcher. There are only 3 catchers that are good catchers right now, they are Chris, Miyuki and Miyauchi and with 5 pitchers Rei, Sawamura, Furuya, Kawakami and Tanba i don't know how will you make it work. There's also Ono but Ono only improved after the Chris retired, that gave him opportunity to train with Sawamura that's why he's able to catch Sawamura and Furuya pitches in his 2nd year.