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  • GodsGolem
    GodsGolem2yr
    Commented

    illegible

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    The Lord Is Too Overbearing
    Fantasy · Frona_Gorgophone
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  • GodsGolem
    GodsGolem2yr
    Replied to Frona_Gorgophone

    ...

    Basil quickly got up and followed him. With Deacon on his shoulder, he walked side by side with Chester. After some exchange of words, they had finally arrived at the headmaster's office.
    The Lord Is Too Overbearing
    Fantasy · Frona_Gorgophone
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  • GodsGolem
    GodsGolem2yr
    Commented

    battle robe*

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    The Lord Is Too Overbearing
    Fantasy · Frona_Gorgophone
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  • GodsGolem
    GodsGolem2yr
    Commented

    ??? 90 degrees?? so literally straight down?

    This descent was at a 90-degree angle and was perfectly straight, except for the small bumps left by the ants' paws.
    Nameless King
    Fantasy · Arlemit
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  • GodsGolem
    GodsGolem3yr
    Commented

    bruh, dumbest setting ever

    The thing that Adrian tried to do first is take a step. He was so nervous that his heart rate increased and the system warned him that if he does not calm down then he would be ejected out of the game. He finally mustered up the courage and took his first step.
    Omega Summoner
    Games · XiaoKongxu
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  • GodsGolem
    GodsGolem3yr
    Commented

    astounded??? I thought he stanned the forums, but he's astounded???

    Elves are race which has fae heritage which allows them to communicate with spirits better thus the have strong affinity with wind, water and wood. Elves have pointy ears and a gentle facial features which astounded Adrian.
    Omega Summoner
    Games · XiaoKongxu
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  • GodsGolem
    GodsGolem3yr
    Posted

    Very little, if any world building. Grammar and tenses are all over the place, super jarring to read. Dialogue seems like it was written by a grade schooler. MC makes nonsensical decisions at random. Super forced plot. Do not read this hot garbage.

    Abyssal Lord of the Magi World
    Fantasy · Redsunworld
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  • GodsGolem
    GodsGolem3yr
    Commented

    aight, dropped. see y'all in a better novel

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    Abyssal Lord of the Magi World
    Fantasy · Redsunworld
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  • GodsGolem
    GodsGolem3yr
    Commented

    Ah, I'm finally free. All thanks to my new master (◕ᴗ◕✿)

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    Abyssal Lord of the Magi World
    Fantasy · Redsunworld
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  • GodsGolem
    GodsGolem3yr
    Commented

    1st choice: "I choose not to be free anymore!"

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    Abyssal Lord of the Magi World
    Fantasy · Redsunworld
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  • GodsGolem
    GodsGolem3yr
    Commented

    but luckily he gets to live and continue doing what others tell him to do!!! yay!!!

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    Abyssal Lord of the Magi World
    Fantasy · Redsunworld
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  • GodsGolem
    GodsGolem3yr
    Commented

    wow, now a perspective switch. hate this characters guts already. hope he gets killed off soon (but he won't bc the demonic, abyssal Lord needs 10 yr old boys as friends for some reason)

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    Abyssal Lord of the Magi World
    Fantasy · Redsunworld
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  • GodsGolem
    GodsGolem3yr
    Commented

    why does he need a follower. he doesn't need him, this is useless and if it's empathy then this is the lamest *Abyssal Lord* ever to be conceived

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    Abyssal Lord of the Magi World
    Fantasy · Redsunworld
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  • GodsGolem
    GodsGolem3yr
    Commented

    death is freedom in this scenario, not following someone else to live. it's literally exactly opposite of what is being said

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    Abyssal Lord of the Magi World
    Fantasy · Redsunworld
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  • GodsGolem
    GodsGolem3yr
    Commented

    this is so lame

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    Abyssal Lord of the Magi World
    Fantasy · Redsunworld
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  • GodsGolem
    GodsGolem3yr
    Commented

    bruh, he just looked. he ain't do a backflip. calm down

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    Abyssal Lord of the Magi World
    Fantasy · Redsunworld
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  • GodsGolem
    GodsGolem3yr
    Commented

    kill him off. no random useless follower pls

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    Abyssal Lord of the Magi World
    Fantasy · Redsunworld
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  • GodsGolem
    GodsGolem3yr
    Commented

    "not all memories"??? what's with the random nerf? lame

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    Abyssal Lord of the Magi World
    Fantasy · Redsunworld
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  • GodsGolem
    GodsGolem3yr
    Commented

    This huge run-on sentence needs to be sectioned out. if you find yourself saying "and" more than once in a sentence, that usually can (and should) be two sentences

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    Abyssal Lord of the Magi World
    Fantasy · Redsunworld
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  • GodsGolem
    GodsGolem3yr
    Commented

    the tenses. please God use consistent tenses. it's so jarring to read constantly changing tenses

    Ch 4 Poison
    Abyssal Lord of the Magi World
    Fantasy · Redsunworld
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