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Plum_Garden3yrCommentedonce upon a time, in another world line...
Han Su-Yeong clenched and unfurled her fist currently enveloped in [Black Flame] and spoke up. "....I can't figure out why this feels like it's been a really long time."- Plum_Garden3yrCommented
I recommend editing it a second time. there is at least one error every other paragraph :)
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question words like "when" should be paired with a question mark at the end of the phrase.
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second sentence is a fragment missing a subject.
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last sentence is a sentence fragment, you started with "while", so after that phrase, add a comma and then a second phrase to complete the thought.
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check ur verb tenses here. "outcasted" and such. The use of orchestrated may be incorrect here without proper context.
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when you have dialogue that ends in a period, the next sentence should be a new paragraph.
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At some point in the marriage, you just accept everything your husband does...
Even though I was looking at a guy completely, utterly trashing my plan to bits, for some reason I didn't get angry. - Plum_Garden3yrCommented
oh my god that's halfway to hand holding
Yu Jung-Hyeok was holding my right wrist with enough force to pop it like a balloon while feeling for my pulse. Now that I thought about it, this guy possessed the next best medical skills after Yi Seol-Hwa in our group. - Plum_Garden3yrCommented
what a tsundere
"....It's not that bad, I suppose." - Plum_Garden3yrCommented
cooking for the wife?
"81st turn is in charge of cooking. His swordsmanship might be lacking, but he's quite talented when it comes to making food. Look forward to it." - Plum_Garden3yrCommented
let go of wifey! double husband battle for KDJ?!
"Shut up, and let go of him. Or else...." - Plum_Garden3yrCommented
TIME FOR SOME LOVIN' MCLOVIN' OLDER BROTHER ;D
Yup, this guy was going to experience severe difficulties pretty soon; according to Ricardo's memories, the original setting for the First Prince was 'loving and warm-hearted big brother', that was why. - Plum_Garden3yrCommented
does it have the same effect as calling him Oppa?
I finished preparing myself and opened my lips. "Older brother." - Plum_Garden3yrCommented
protect the wife!!
Arrows flew past Kim Dok-Ja's head with barely any room to spare; some of them even accurately fell towards his back, but the First Prince quickly swung his sword to deflect them all. - Plum_Garden3yrCommented
protect the wife!!
Arrows flew past Kim Dok-Ja's head with barely any room to spare; some of them even accurately fell towards his back, but the First Prince quickly swung his sword to deflect them all. - Plum_Garden3yrCommented
being stared at by a Loli demon
Its inside was like a thick, sticky swamp. Listening to the private thoughts of a being looking back at me with a pair of quietly withdrawn eyes was making me feel rather uncomfortable. - Plum_Garden3yrCommented
Uriel?!?!
[■■. Take off your hands, Michael. Unless you really want to go to hell.] - Plum_Garden3yrCommented
happy world where jonghyuk and dokja are friends? yes!!
「 The world that you showed, does it really exist? 」