So Ms Norris is dead and not stoned like in the Book?

Found it to be a good book start. The system is nice and how the rules loopholes are used or the not to be known rules. The only thing I nit pick is that he gains the knowledge of the a book by reading the first page as normaly one should not extrapolate all knowledge from it I think. But even if he reads the hole book it would only take up time or until he gets a way to quickly read a hole book so not that important to nit pick.

Ahh thanks I knew he was adopted and the love potion but that Lupin helped I forgot.

Why would he try to kill Lupin? Just to please Snape? I mean finding a cure for Lycanthropy would be more plausible for his character or did I forget a encounter in story?

A very good written prolog. Now question would be what the Wizarding world is going to be for him. And his introduction to it especially his reaction to the dirty leaky cauldron and Gringotts of how it's going to function. Then the last point would be what type of Dumbledore is going to be and what the Pendragon legacy is going to play in the story. Well Dumbledore is in after thought not important as a OC with no HP knowledge but he could be skeptical with him based on what he is going to read from the books he is going to buy.

The Only thing that was unfinished I think is that you do not get to know where the Harry doppelganger came from as it is no longer Ron.

Potter? It should be Greengrass or Abraxus. Otherwise a Good story and chapter.

Now the NSA is getting involved this makes it instresting as he maybe quick enough that they do not get any information anymore that is useful or he gets kidnapped as the Bugzapper can be used to get control of anything that is not 100% secure. And if one think about it what about Hackers do they in the future need to get a social engineering degree to Hack something? If the AI Tech is as good as that of the last version of the book even that attack vector would be gone.

Good to see him taking revenge and not just easy making money without anyone trying to make trouble. I mean in the first version he build a Monopol on weakness finding and got no troubles for it and that was even without the professor making trouble.

If the quality of this chapter is going to be standard the rewrite is worth it as the author in a comment already said it was a summary tone in how it was written. Based on his anger brought by the plagiarism I would have thought he made a Programm for plagiarism and put all of the university thesis in it and publish the most likely result that there are a lot of it?

1 It OK and can be a new way how a spiderman fic was written as most times Peter is just a genius, hero and never a sports star. In addition, he could get a better scholarship for university with it and his grades or is that different.

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I can only Agree things need Requirements or a Cost and these things are not Flaws but the foundation why something can be done. Otherwise it's like Multiplication has the Flaw that you need to know Addition or something similar kind of relationship. True Flaws would be inefficiency, backslash or limits that can be removed or so.

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I just thought that the oath could also be a type of charm as it can be checked by the wards so it somehow connected and therefore there is only one type of oath and he was doomed to break it as I think he never returned to a magical hospital after he took it and started the war. In addition why is he not allowed to practice in the Muggle World as these are separate countries as shown that the king is in effect an foreign royal politician to magical Britain and he is only allowed to use non magical means anyway because of the Statue of Secrecy.

I understand why the oath should be broken because of Tom as all other things he did were because of war but was Tom an of his own said Enemy to Mason and even split his soul which should not make him human anymore. I so in my opinion no breaking happened and it is a plot of the unspeakable to control him as he accepts the breaking therefore the bindings on himself. Still a great Story and I aspect great things for the Futur especially how Canon years are going be different. As there is no reason for it...