Tempy

Has these chapters been getting shorter and shorter?

Great Potential yet Sub Par Execution (Skip to the bottom for TL;DR) So far I have read upwards to chapter 75 and all I have to say is this story has potential. The story revolves around the main MC Ye Bei who is an immortal that has outlived many historical figures and gods. It is also mentioned quite frequently that he has been secretly guiding humanity for 90,000 years. The premise is quite intriguing if you are into massively overpowered mc’s, but where the story starts falling apart is as follows: 1. The objective of the MC is massively confusing! There are no clear end goal. From wanting to visit old “friends”, eating their cooking (apparently he teaches all his friends to cook his favorite meals), to being omnipotent/omnipresent but cannot fathom the secrets of immortality yet seeks to know more, to finally wanting to find a girl which he claimed he doesn’t care for and someone named the Old Deceased (whom is hinted at being the girl at times then a man at others). 2. The author tries extremely hard to make the mc more mysterious but it simply ends up in a conflict. One minute the mc wants to punish traitors but when his desciple wishes to help, he gets angry and wants to do nothing about it and just explore the world. Things as simple as having dinner is strethed to 2-3 chapters having to explain the nuances of his every action, words, and their meanings. 3. The name bombs are ridiculous! Every action the mc does leads to a flashback of him either teaching/guiding a historical figure or simply letting them put their names on his work. From painting, playing chess, to something as simple as grinding ink. Reading this feels more like reading a history text book. 4. This point also ties to the writting quality and grammar. The story has a lot of grammar mistakes. Some are so bad that they change the narrative of the story being told leading you to be confused in the following chapters. They are not only easy to miss but annoying to have to think about what the author meant once you find them. 5. This final point ties with the third and fourth points. The large amount of name dropping and sub par writing quality creates confusion in the sense that character names change frequently and out of the blue! Every character tied to the mc has their real name, pen names, nicknames, and names the mc just spontaneously makes up for them. One major example is Wang Xiu who also goes by Winter Jasmine then out of nowhere it changes to Ying Chun. It is as if the author feels that he must inform us of every characters name, surname, nationality, and pennames! Should you stop reading for some time and return without briefing yourself on their many names; its easy to get confused about who is who. TL;DR - This story is quite slow and has objectives all over the place. It tries to much to build mystery and a sense of omnipotence. Paired with mediocre grammar and a large amount of name dropping, its the perfect mixture to confuse the unsuspecting reader. Did I mention that it is painfully slow? Be warned, something as simple as eating or painting can and will take up 2-3 chapters. I would like to thank everyone that has read this far. I would like to state that this review is my personal opinion gathered from the first 75 chapters. Enjoy your day and give the novel a try; after all, it has a lot of potential.