Envision
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Ive read everything that isn't locked behind powerstones and there are so many spelling, grammar, and sentence structure issues it was hard to follow let alone get immersed in.
Yup, I dont want to spoil anything so I wont give anything specific.
Thanks for commenting! I haven't read a book on the platform for a while now so I had no clue about the fast fast being genre locked! That is something very good to know about this decision. IF I were to go premium it would only be after I have a stockpile of chapters; I would want to make it worth it for everyone. Again, thank you for your input!
I thank you for your input! I used to read a lot on the platform and would always feel bad for having to stop reading a book due to the locked chapters. It is one of the reasons why I am reaching out to you guys and girls for input as readers. There used to be a membership thing where you paid monthly and got to ready as much as you could; sadly they got rid of the system for the current one.
XD would you believe this is a spelling mistake that I now have to live with?
You're on the dot :)
I love to see creative criticism like this. It allows me to touch up my work when and where people notice it. It not only improves my work but also improves reader's ability to follow my story better. Thank you for your honest feedback. I hope you stop by later in the future to re-review my work. You have been very helpful!
I made a few edits to the paragraphs you highlighted. Thanks for the input.
A very interesting start to the to a VR style game. The first three chapters are at a brisk pace which is always nice. I like the idea of the "Golden Eggs", they remind me of "Easter Eggs" you often find in real video games :) I hope we can see more world building in the future; there is great potential here.
I love a mystery, who or what this girl is appears to be promising. I hope you continue to develop the story while weaving the mystery deeper and deeper into your story.