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_UNKNOWN_1yrPostedThis story is very cheesy and cliche. The discussion between characters is very stilted and nonsensical. Its pretty much the same writing skill as a bulk of writers on here. It’s not one of the worst stories on here, but it’s no where near the best. I can say the idea was great but the execution was subpar.
- _UNKNOWN_2yrCommented
Imma just hope you purposely said ‘Boruto’s dad’ just to get a rise out of the readers.
The agonising sound of the wheel resounded with Bellum praying it wasn't something useless. Bellum knew what the Elemental Nations world was, it was the world of Boruto, it ranges from before Boruto's dad was born to when the Otsutsuki destroyed the world by harvesting a chakra fruit from it, the anime and manga of Boruto was his favourite as a kid, he read and watched everything and even watched the anime of Boruto's dad to get why people were outraged when Sarada killed Sasuke for the Mangekyo sharingan and then took his to eyes gain the eternal mangekyo sharingan and then the rinnegan when Orochimaru gave her Sasuke's and Boruto's dad cells. He was worried, If he gets born into a weak clan, he'd die like a canon fodder. Although it didn't finish because his empire invaded other continents starting world war 3, no one was going to be reading a manga when every empire in the world was at war. - _UNKNOWN_2yrCommentedCh 10 Yooooo....stick till the end, apologies for my bs
- _UNKNOWN_2yrPosted
The MC doesnt really seem to have a reason or a motive for indiscriminately killing and raping, except for the fact that he finds it interesting. The part where he says he regrets being the one who started WW3 and trying to leave that situation to him then wanting to overturn the hero society and causing deaths just for the fun of it or cus he finds it interesting....??? That doesn’t really make any sense to me. I don’t see where him becoming a heroic villain is shown. He just seems like an OP Shigaraki w/o the mental instability and with assasination experience. Maybe if instead of ‘motivating’ the future heroes by killing and raping he could have cruelly killed those who ‘deserve it’. Like the corrupt heroes or those behind the original hosts’ fate or actual villains. I’ll admit that I didnt get far in the book but this is the impression i get so far. And it will be the farthest im going get into this book. Personally, it’s not for me.
- _UNKNOWN_2yrCommentedCh 1 Crimson
- _UNKNOWN_2yrPosted
I really love this story and I couldn’t wait for it to be updated. I came to reread the chapters, but found that they were deleted. Author-san it would really be helpful if you could tell us if you are discontinuing this story or just rewriting it. If it’s being discontinued please repost the chapters that were deleted, so that us the readers can have time to mourn. Any update would be good honestly. I think its best if you tell us what’s going on with the ff.
- _UNKNOWN_2yrCommentedCh 3 Chapter 3: Please comment
- _UNKNOWN_3yrCommentedORA ORA ORA ORA ORA ORA ORA ORA oORA
- _UNKNOWN_3yrCommented"Who's ferocious. Annie, you didn't stop sucking down there…"
- _UNKNOWN_3yrCommentedon another note. You guys... ur out for blood...like legit the death of his teammates but i got some stuff planned for them...
- _UNKNOWN_3yrCommented
Sacrifices must be made.
I was originally going to say don't get attached to his teammates as I planned to kill them off via Orochimaru, I wanted to originally make him unlock his Conquerers Haki that way. But someone pointed out to make him have non cannon fodder teammates so I'll see if I could develop these oc's... - _UNKNOWN_3yrCommented"Ahhh..come on wuss. Make love to me," said Eleanor. Jack gave no reply. "Wuss, wuss, pussy, wuss, pussy…." Jack who couldn't handle it anymore just gave up and gave Eleanor a kiss with the intention to go all out and have sex. But after giving her a kiss, her water broke. "Wow, I am good at this," said Jack.