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Kaliesin3yrCommentedI feel like all this information would be great as background information that you could slowly release, show or experience as the story progresses. Stating it all at once breaks the story flow like spoilers.
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is it necessary to say this information? Wouldn't it be better to let the readers explore this through the MC's experiences rather than stating this like wish fulfillment?
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I feel like this is a fanboy
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it would be better if Hidan had a blood manipulation ability & some barrier ninjutsu. This way he can solve his weakness in long-range combat, retrieve blood, and turtle down behind barriers to do his ritual.
Kakazu is I think a very interesting character for me, the only reason he lost was plot armor tbh. For gods sake he's older than the 3rd hokage, he has a power that makes him super hard to kill and you're telling me naruto kills him. You telling me he didn't have a backup plan, or have the skill to escape? *sigh* I feel like Kakazu would've been an interesting character to go in-depth in. He was betrayed by his own village. How come naruto didn't give him the talk no jutsu. Sorry just me rambling! Anyways let me know if you guys want me to continue this or not. Awaiting your replies. Cya!! - Kaliesin3yrPosted
This has remarkable similarity to 'Pokemon -- A Mystical Journey', from character background, pokemon, plot background & progression. Even ranking tiers and plot points are alike. A pokemon chaotic world is a rich idea, but this seems indistinguishable from the above fanfic, besides name changes and some tweaks here and there.