bamjrr
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Just a Highschool student writing for fun
2018-07-23 JoinedUnited States
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bamjrr13dCommented"What the—how is this—?" Mr. Negative looked left and right, bewildered, then looked up. High above, perched on the crane was a shadow. Six of his men were dangling off the crane in cocoons. The power he bestowed was useless. Utterly useless!- bamjrr1mthCommentedCh 33 Slingshot
- bamjrr1mthCommentedCh 29 Uncontested
- bamjrr2mthCommented
You should probably stick to one form of showing dialogue. (Person: “example.”) isn’t really a good way to show dialogue, it kinda breaks your attention of the story because it sounds like your reading from a script/play. Stick to just using “” to signify when a person is talking like you are doing with the mc. Having both of those in there is really distracting.
Ch 1 Looking him straight in the eyes...eye? - bamjrr2mthReplied to Marcia_05Ch 19 Announcement.
- bamjrr2mthCommentedCh 19 Announcement.
- bamjrr4mthCommentedCh 2 An unexpecte trip
- bamjrr5mthCommentedCh 4 Chapter 4
- bamjrr5mthCommentedCh 14 Chapter 14: Montage Music is needed Pt.5
- bamjrr5mthCommentedCh 10 -10- Big Brother
- bamjrr5mthCommentedCh 3 Chapter 3
- bamjrr5mthCommentedCh 1 Chapter 1- RETURN FROM EXILE
- bamjrr5mthCommentedCh 9 The Devil's Advocate
- bamjrr6mthCommentedCh 46 Chapter 46 - The Collision II
- bamjrr6mthCommentedCh 45 Adjusting The Course
- bamjrr6mthCommented
This suit man😂
Sitting atop a building, perched with his long coat flowing behind him, Spider-Man looked on with solemn eyes beneath his glass goggles, wondering where to even start. There's far too many things happening at once for one man to handle. 'There's gotta be thousands of them. Where do I even start?' he thought to himself, however, he'd get his answer after hearing tires screeching and a loud clash of metals. - bamjrr8mthCommented
In and* out
I took the subway, exposing myself to more of New York's busy life and the throngs of people that flowed in out of places in a ceaseless stream. Of course I soon found out a drawback of my telepathy.