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I really like Chinese novels

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  • Jccr
    Jccr26d
    Replied to Young_Dexter_1905

    What I understood is that the author wants the rebellion to begin, which is the beginning of the canon (I am referring to the fall of the Targaryens), since what he wants is power, and being on the revolutionary side he will surely obtain it (at least more power than he will obtain under the Targaryen government), He says he does not want to interfere but refers to the start of the rebellion because what happened after the start of the war would no longer matter to him the future of Baelish remains unusable as long as the mc kills him after he fulfills his role in helping with the start of the rebellion.

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  • Jccr
    Jccr28d
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    It is the second fanfic that I read about an agent of baroque work and I must say that it is very good, it is very well developed, in addition the rhythm of the dialogue and the thought of the Mc is articulated very well what does that it is very fluid the reading and the development of the events does not seem forced, the Supa Supa is a fruit that with a good imagination can be developed immensely, it continues with the good work.

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  • Jccr
    Jccr28d
    Replied to amaturewriter

    It doesn't take away from what you say, but you are "supposing" that the MC is willing or just wants to stop things from happening, while it is clearly said in one chapter that the MC wants the rebellion to happen the point is whether the MC uses his capabilities to stop things but for now until the last chapter the MC intends for the rebellion to break out.

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    The Bloody Falcon
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  • Jccr
    Jccr28d
    Replied to amaturewriter

    No, what I'm saying is that as long as the mc doesn't interfere and let things take their course, the things that started the rebellion are still there, Robert and his obsession with Lyanna, Raeghar with his obsession with prophecy, Peter defeated by Brandon humiliated who seeks revenge and a way to stay with Cat and the increasingly unstable crazy king who can burn Brandon and Rikard for any reason, for all these reasons and on the condition that the mc wants things to take their course a rebellion perhaps not equal to the canon will happen.

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    The Bloody Falcon
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  • Jccr
    Jccr28d
    Replied to amaturewriter

    The mc has not eliminated Peter, it has eliminated Peter's future as master of coins and controller of the valley which happens after Jon marries Lysa which happens after the rebellion and therefore the Peter who without any position was one of the causes of the rebellion is still there, On the other hand what happened to the Starks is something almost indispensable to make the Rebellion more legitimate, therefore the mc should not do anything, obviously if what the author is looking for is a more ruthless mc that seeks to gain influence at the expense of others as a Twin Lannister.

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  • Jccr
    Jccr28d
    Replied to amaturewriter

    I understand what you are saying I am only saying what the author wrote that he is interested in the rebellion happening so I guess he (mc) will make sure at least not to interfere more than his very existence does, plus if Brandon and Ricardo are burned a rebellion will start if or when.

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  • Jccr
    Jccr28d
    Replied to amaturewriter

    Nowhere does it say that it can do magic if I am not mistaken, and if you doubt what it can do with the serum I recommend that you read the great lion and game of thrones: the prideful one both mc have the serum and are very good stories.

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  • Jccr
    Jccr28d
    Replied to amaturewriter

    But the main cause of the rebellion is Raeghar's escape with Lyanna which if the mc doesn't do anything will happen anyway as it is a medieval world if or if Brandon and Ned's father have to go to the capital to ask for explanations and the crazy king didn't care why they went to the capital.

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  • Jccr
    Jccr29d
    Replied to amaturewriter

    Besides, most of the plot until the end of the rebellion has nothing to do with the valley so the plot until the beginning of the rebellion while the Mc does not interfere will remain the same.

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  • Jccr
    Jccr29d
    Replied to amaturewriter

    I'm going to answer because it seems to me that your review was a little unjustified and has no arguments to back it up, maybe to say that the mc desire to be attractive is a little wrong on the part of the author, it seems to me that what he really meant was charismatic which is a very needed trait in a medieval culture to be a valuable commander, besides there is no absolutely perfect kingdom. The valley has potential, a very favorable natural defense the eagle's nest is probably the easiest defensible fortress in Westeros and the most difficult to invade, an army of veterans thanks to the fights with the mountain tribes, in addition to its culture of knights that encourages the rigorous training of possible commanders, the valley has a great economic potential its food trade is only inferior to that of the high garden. About the wishes are perfect for a balance between a powerful Mc and one that does not destroy the original narrative of Game of thrones the super soldier serum that gives the physical of a superior warrior from body to body, the charisma of a leader and a commander for the good management of time and the restricted library to have the right knowledge of a medieval culture which again prevents the destruction of the narrative of the original history which makes this fanfic can preserve the essence of Game of thrones and not become one of those stories with 7 year old children with ***** bodies that control the world.

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  • Jccr
    Jccr29d
    Posted

    Very good fan of Game of Thrones, it didn't fall into the most stupid mistakes like a three year old giving orders to all the adults, and it's a relief since there aren't many Arryn fans and they are a great house with a lot to exploit unlike the most used ones like the Starks or Targaryen. Another positive point is that their desires are not totally extravagant which makes the story boring unlike many other fans who abuse their "wishes as reincarnation" and make the story absurd. Good work continues with the story 👍.

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  • Jccr
    Jccr1mth
    Posted

    It is a very good translation, I have tried to read other translations and they are really bad for the brain. [img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend]

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    One Piece - Tundergod of marine
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    Jccr1mth
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    The Witch Diaries (TVD Fanfic)
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  • Jccr
    Jccr1mth
    Commented

    good chapter

    Ch 9 Alchemy and Canon starts
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  • Jccr
    Jccr1mth
    Commented

    The pov change went really well.

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  • Jccr
    Jccr1mth
    Replied to deadly_orange

    Yes, definitely

    Ch 6 Gravity Falls
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  • Jccr
    Jccr1mth
    Commented

    The transition between thoughts and conversations is much better, you could try narrating in 3rd person to give a broader perspective to the narration, good job you are doing well.

    Ch 6 Gravity Falls
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  • Jccr
    Jccr1mth
    Commented

    It is very good so far, but in the transition between what is a conversation and what is thought still lacks fluency.

    Ch 5 Change of plans
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    Jccr1mth
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  • Jccr
    Jccr1mth
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    It is very original, on this page I had never come across something from Gravity Falls, it is an original story of a darker Dipper that is more attached to the more supernatural side of the series, good job, work on the interaction between characters and on Dipper's thoughts.

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