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Uveilazatrum6hCommentedI don't know, maybe it is just me, but this feels too... Chinese-fanfic-style? I have no idea how to describe it. Additionally, Law, a boy who crawled through dead bodies to survive when the surrounding kingdoms were slaughtering people in his kingdom getting shivers just being near another psycho is not realistic (which is weird argument for a fanfic about One Piece)
"Just helped a friend of mine and took down one of the Doflamingo Pirates," Ken said, and Law looked deeply at Ken. Ken saying those words casually would make Law shiver a bit. He spoke like he had just crushed an ant and nothing more.- Uveilazatrum2dCommented
Why lie then? Calling out that Mr diaper and then just going back on his own word?
Ken then proceeded to stab the two chakra rods right through his palms and crucify him to the ground. Ken dd that so fast that Senor Pink couldn't defend himself, not that he could, but even then he didn't stop Ken. - Uveilazatrum3dPosted
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Yeah, there were no dirt or dust on a ship, but there are a lot of fire and lightning, right?
Now Jon have made some progress, he finally succed in leaf training, but he need more proficiency to combine it into mokuton. So he start the next step, for water he try to use chakra to control water at sea and also make water from air without ninjutsu. For earth, he can't do it here because there's no soil or stone to use, and theres no dust above the sea to make stone from air, so he just train his fire and lightning by doing jutsus and try to minimize the chakra output. He already succeed training chidori, he try it in water and the fishes start floating. The crew start partying and he has a new job, fisherman. - Uveilazatrum19dReplied to Zaitro
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The original fanfiction is good, but as all "chat group fanfics" this one too gets a little too thin-spread between worlds, characters and plots in the later chapters, around 70th or further. That's the one main downside in my opinion. Obviously the further it goes the more weird some decisions look, but it is a fanfic after all and it is written pretty well, no matter the plot
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As for your question - author already stated that this is all in one galaxy
As the ship set its course for the outer rim, far away from any Republic control, Sidious pondered the possibilities. The Kree and Nova Empires, both nations embroiled in war, presented a new arena for him to dominate. - Uveilazatrum25dReplied to
If you use characters from MCU then on Earth alone there are several characters who can put SW Republic on knees with just their powers. The number of these characters increase if you include comic book characters. As for outside Earth, well, such enemies either come to Earth for some reason and are major threat, like Thanks, Galactus, Skrulls and so on, or they are just part of another Guardians of the Galaxy or X-Men villain gallery, which makes them unbeatable for normal Sith and Jedi. the advantages of SW is that it have tens of thousands of worlds in Republic alone with their sector representatives on Coruscant. That means that it any of Marvel civilization use just grunts and start prolonged war of attrition then Republic most likely will win
As the ship set its course for the outer rim, far away from any Republic control, Sidious pondered the possibilities. The Kree and Nova Empires, both nations embroiled in war, presented a new arena for him to dominate. - Uveilazatrum25dCommented
choosing a guy who spends most of his time in senate or in council isn't actually good idea
Finally, Peter came to a decision, "I choose, Master Windu!" - Uveilazatrum1mthCommented
12 years
He had arrived in the year 1510 of the Sea Circle Calendar, ten years before the protagonist Luffy set sail. - Uveilazatrum1mthReplied to CustomFireblast
and I said inefficient, not impossible. plus you don't have to be ambidextrous to pull off two swords. It would be just less efficient if you don't have it.
When Galladon entered the hall, together with his close guard Gustav, both Renly and Loras were quite surprised by their large frames and the weapons they carried with them. Galladon always kept his two swords by his side. He practiced the way of double swords since he was a child. Since then, he always kept two swords within arms reach of himself. - Uveilazatrum1mthCommented
Lol Young Master mode.
He truly cared about his family and close retainers, but his awe for the life of ordinary small folk had long disappeared in his eighteen years as an heir of a noble family. The moment he aimed his arrow at himself this young man was dead for him. Offending a noble will almost always lead to this result in the world of Westeros. - Uveilazatrum1mthCommented
is author trying to attract Chinese readers or something?
Overall, Galladon Tarth felt very comfortable in his position. He was extremely sure that no large-scale invasion of Tarth would happen, and even if they tried it would fail miserably. This gave him confidence to act like that in front of Renly Baratheon, who was desperately gripping the arm of his chair, trying not to break into a fury. Since he was born, he was never once treated with such arrogance, not even by his parents or his two older brothers. Since becoming the young lord of the Stormlands, everybody treated him like a young god, praising him for his character and conduct. - Uveilazatrum1mthReplied to marcoo
Don't misunderstand, I am not trying to say that you should change it or anything. I am just mentioning that in my opinion it is cliche and it would be far more effective to use one sword properly.
When Galladon entered the hall, together with his close guard Gustav, both Renly and Loras were quite surprised by their large frames and the weapons they carried with them. Galladon always kept his two swords by his side. He practiced the way of double swords since he was a child. Since then, he always kept two swords within arms reach of himself. - Uveilazatrum1mthReplied to Uveilazatrum
what I meant to say is that I expected this to be more like intergalactic travel and so on
For example, Peter learned that the Galaxy was mainly split between 3 separate Governments. The Galactic Republic, which controls a whopping 60%, mainly making up the center of the galaxy.