LadyMomoko
I am from Romania and I like to read, to crochet and play games.
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LadyMomoko3dCommentedCh 324 Unexpected Discovery (5)detailThe Cannon Fodder in the Global Apocalypse Game lives a leisurely lifeFantasy ¡ The_Sweet_Dumpling- LadyMomoko11dReplied to Frostblue
indeedđ
Ever since the strange matter in the captain's room, he would always give her this particular look resembling how her Senior Sister would look at a pile of spirit stones and asked her to go the gambling house and be her mascot.detailThe Cannon Fodder in the Global Apocalypse Game lives a leisurely lifeFantasy ¡ The_Sweet_Dumpling - LadyMomoko17dCommented
a small mistake:*emanciated* instead of *emancipated*
The emancipated and thin nymphs retreated to their prison after they saw the newcomers.detailThe Cannon Fodder in the Global Apocalypse Game lives a leisurely lifeFantasy ¡ The_Sweet_Dumpling - LadyMomoko18dCommented
...the first twenty-seven *years * of his life...
Zein barely left the end-zone for the first twenty-seven of his life, but he had visited two foreign countries in this past year. - LadyMomoko21dCommentedCh 365 Chapter 357. Mark of Devotion (1)
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why is it Shivani now, before it was Shilo?
Shivani had a melancholic expression as she visited the kitchen remembering some memories.detailThe Cannon Fodder in the Global Apocalypse Game lives a leisurely lifeFantasy ¡ The_Sweet_Dumpling - LadyMomoko1mthCommented
This is good, it is just one repeated paragraph from the previous chapter. Thank youđ
If Sean was going to marry Dwight he would of course need to follow where Dwight is. If Dwight is still in Layton Lewis' Army which is still assigned at the border Sean also needs to stay at the border. - LadyMomoko1mthCommented
*Lyre not Ryzel
"I did ask my brother to beat up that bast*rd Dwight for Ry but he didn't say anything when he got home so I assume he didn't do that. Oops-" Ryzel stopped what he was saying and awkwardly smiled while looking at Layton Lewis and Mervin. - LadyMomoko1mthCommentedCh 462 Brewing Wars (Part 2)
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Please don't start a new chapter by repeating too much from the previous chapter. For me it breaks the flow of the story. If you have to repeat a bit of the previous chapter 1 or 2 paragraphs is ok, but not more than that.
Ch 32 Chapter 31: Eating Breakfast Prepared by the General, Part 2 - LadyMomoko1mthCommented
Is it possible that she is pregnant again?
She went to the cocoa tree. She remembered craving for chocolate in her pregnancy. Was it because she wasn't unsatisfied at the time that she was getting these cravings again? - LadyMomoko1mthCommented
maybe "wasn't unsatisfied" should be "was unsatisfied" or "wasn't satisfied", but I am not sure
She went to the cocoa tree. She remembered craving for chocolate in her pregnancy. Was it because she wasn't unsatisfied at the time that she was getting these cravings again? - LadyMomoko2mthCommentedCh 425 Level 10!
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so he also *has* one.
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2 times 200 units of wood? is there a mistake?
- Building Costs: 200 units of wood, 200 units of wood, and 20 silver coins]detailThe Cannon Fodder in the Global Apocalypse Game lives a leisurely lifeFantasy ¡ The_Sweet_Dumpling - LadyMomoko3mthCommented
did you mean to use baffling instead of bluffing ?
Long Haoran's pupils constricted and he was too late to block it. However, when he though he would perished, he did not feel pain at all and what's more bluffing was his HP only dropped by [-50] points.detailThe Cannon Fodder in the Global Apocalypse Game lives a leisurely lifeFantasy ¡ The_Sweet_Dumpling - LadyMomoko3mthCommented
I think it should be Little Lotus, if I remember correctly Little Mantou is the fox
Little Ginseng and Little Mantou spent a minute fanning away the dust to regain their views of the field, and what they saw made them drop their lower jaws on the ground.detailThe Cannon Fodder in the Global Apocalypse Game lives a leisurely lifeFantasy ¡ The_Sweet_Dumpling - LadyMomoko3mthCommented
Altera not Althea. I am thinking you were referring to the village.
It was also a plan that would inevitably place Althea in a lot of people's maps. - LadyMomoko3mthCommented
A slight mistake: it just said that it has 52 000 hp, and now it went up.
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prosthetic hand*
After a while, Jiang Zhi added seriously, "Don't worry, we'll find you a prosthetic leg when we go hunting out of the base."