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Teslatrooper15dCommentedYou repeated the sentences here.
"Michael, you seem a bit distracted today. Anything we can help with?" Antoinette asked, concern lacing her tone.- Teslatrooper2mthCommented
There's two mistakes in this sentence. Since it's Michael entering the room, it should be "he stepped" instead of "she stepped", and "he saw" instead of "she saw".
As soon as she stepped inside the conference room, she saw a gorgeous woman with a mature look on her face. She looked a bit like Catherine. Speaking of Catherine, she was present inside, waving a hand at him. - Teslatrooper1yrCommented
"stake" should be "steak"
Artemis' eyes bulged in disbelief when the piece of juicy stake was crushed and mixed with his saliva. - Teslatrooper1yrCommented
"is majesty" should be "his majesty"
The soldier stood at the door. "Your highness, Artemis... It will be lunchtime soon. Is majesty will grab you then, will that be alright with you?" - Teslatrooper1yrCommented
"baby shifts" should be "navy ships"
Another feature that the baby shifts had, which the cruise lines didn't have, was the many training rooms, some strictly for the Baymardians and others for anyone else like those dorm Carona or guests like Artemis. - Teslatrooper1yrCommented
altered should be appeared.
The thick pink fog vanished as quickly as it altered, and everyone was stupidly staring at a very unexplainable sight. ('0') - Teslatrooper1yrCommented
punch should be bunch.
One by one, the many rough-looking pirates mocked the punch. - Teslatrooper1yrCommented
severally should be severely i think.
The ships had broken down severally. And 3rd prince Artemis had to rile up his sleeves and join the crew in sealing the leaks with tar. - Teslatrooper1yrCommented
"number of priority" should be "number one priority"
The Demon Rats were no doubt shocked by the emergence of the train but after all the intense fighting, they got over it pretty quickly and knew that the war train was their number of priority to ensure their survival. - Teslatrooper1yrCommented
flowed should be followed.
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"high-hoer" should be "high-power" or "high-powered" I think. I'm not really sure.
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"sin of luck" should be "son of luck"
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saying should be sailing.
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good should be blood I think.
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millitary attorney should be millitary attire I think?
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literacy should have gone up, or maybe you should have used illiteracy.
Literacy in U.N empires has gone down by a large number ever since their empires came in contact with Baymard. Many were now beginners or intermediary writers and speakers of Pyron/Roma. - Teslatrooper1yrCommented
medical should be medieval.
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Yodan zine should be Yodan zone.
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fish should be dish.
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ill should be changed to I'll.
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