It would be amazing to see your MC archetype in a setting like Lord of Mystery’s or a VRMMO setting. I would still read anything you make but it would be interesting to see how your MC would handle settings with larger elements or concepts that he can’t exploit quickly. With game systems or highly powerful entities that you can never trust or understand it would be great to see the MC thrive in-spite of the challenge.

All good, your story. Write what your heart desires. My feedback to your well reasoned comment would be since this is already an AU Yamato age and early chunin status shouldn’t be a big factor. I can’t imagine the MC would fit in a traditional genin team. I get the development of that would be good, from a reader a dream team tackling interesting plots which you can grab from the movies atleast to me sounds cooler. But regardless I’ll continue reading and enjoying the story great job so far!

Great comments here, I think the most interesting team would be. Anzo Sarutobi (Future growth possible if introduced to monkey sage mode, making a good recurring character and mentor, someone the MC can trust fully outside of a family figure) Female Itachi (Izuna I think the name was) for no other reason beside it’s a character we know and can care about, there can only be so many characters and personalities in a story. And finally the clinch Yamato as the third. (Another character with strong growth potential if his yang release and mukoton are expanded and explored. If he is given a focus like taijutsu or staffs it would be another interesting character. Especially if he inherits the monkey summon and sage mode. It would make three really strong S-level ninjas and can represent the next generations of Sannins MC - Long Range, Yin Female Itachi- Mid-range - Yamato - Short Range Yang

Yet this would be the wrong approach. It’s a short term gain to flip the script and break cheshires legs here and have her captured. But a long term loss. First it displays a level of aggression that will alarm and alert the JL like nothing else. A 2 week old clone already breaking legs when he had the power and precision to restrain her. Growing stronger everyday, exceeding all expectations from his DNA donors. Dante is dangerous they all know that. But his mild, friendly and controlled approach is the right balance to navigate this situation. At this point being too competent is a detriment. Second, It’s also a great team building moment. If everyone including Dante makes a mistake and as a group work together to improve their team work and tactics then they all win and grow as a fighting force and as friends/Allies.

Idea??? Save Jean Absorb and adapt to Phoenix Cosmic Energy Have a “YOU SHALL NOT PASS” moment and save the X-men, F4; and super bros and let them escape in the jet. This will lead to you being crushed by the water which you will adapt to the pressure and here’s the kicker The MC will fall into a one-way entry point to the Savage Lands. The hero teams will believe that you perished saving everyone and the world. The MC gets to explore/conquer the savage lands get the special vibranium there and fully explore as much of his powers as possible. This can lead to a big time skip where he jumps back for avengers or the convergence whatever you think works best.

10/10, one of the best fan fics on this site. Could not put it down and binged it on one sitting.

Great!! I love the story went in this direction. It really adds weight and proper consequences to the MC actions. Everyone else in the comments has already said it but I really appreciate Tom losing this fight. Losing is part of life and more lessons can be and should be learned from losing. A character that loses and preserves is all the more likable and stronger for it.

??? I can’t believe this got 11 thumbs up. This is a horrible suggestion/request. Charles Xavier is a leader of a faction, the cornerstone of the mutants coexisting with human ideology. What kind of consequences do you think his subordinates will allow a complete nutcase (from their POV) stranger allow on their leader?? The world is a house of cards and it needs every “good” super powered human defending it as possible. The MC may not like that but he understands the threats out there and he should want every additional person on his corner. The best way this can end is the MC compromises with Charles and let him learn the error of his way. Resulting a more wholistic Charles and having x-men support in a future Arc. I understand the MC has been terribly tortured for 2 years and will and should make mistake and lose sight on the big picture. But this is the Marvel universe. Everyone is one snap away from obliteration. Some problems like this one you can’t and shouldn’t punch your way out off. Then again, this isn’t my story. Author do whatever you want. I’ll enjoy it as long as it good and free as the freeloader I am.

This is a great way to introduce another training arc but this time focused on control. To fine tune his power from a capital ship ballistic missile to a lightsaber. Concentrated, strategic, and innovated use of his abilities. This can also apply to his mental abilities as well, getting academically trained by beast and telekinetic or telepathic training with Phoenix. While trying to mold a new life for himself.

Hope Nathan doesn’t slack on the whole occlumency thing. Lots of training multiplier potential there.

This kind of immature action that utilized three infinity stones, and executed a multiverse level ritual could actually be a really good lesson if Harry faces consequences from this. How long has he been alive for and how many step backs or failures has he failed to overcome?? His been alive for a long time and faced almost zero step backs. This should turn into a sticking point were Harry gets humbled by something or someone and learns this sort of behavior no matter how good feeling is a immature and improper use of the power he wields. I get the morality and ethics are stupid concepts when spoken about a being that can bend reality to their whim. But still this one off filler chapter could actually be a really great opportunity to explore how Harry actually reacts to implicitly doing something stupid and growing from it.

For the Saitama Recovery you could go the manipulator root. Since you are manipulating your biology to overcome itself. Which can then expand into adding magic, ki, etc.

I think you need to take some time away and evaluate what you would like to explore in this story. Check out Basilisk-born by Ebenbild on fanfiction net. This story even seems something inspired by it due to the themes and plots. Check that story out and think what you would like to do for your own. So far this fanfic seems very sad in that the MC has lived thousands of years enslaved by fate with no freedom to really choose what she would like to do. Idk where it’s best to take the story, it’s ultimately up to you. I’m just a freeloader consuming it. All that matters is that you enjoy the process of writing it and figuring out where this should all go.

To take that a step further. To use one of the big world ending avenger battles in the future as a way to expose the wizarding world in a organic way that can allow wizards and witches to be spun as protectors of humanity and as one of the last line of defense for the planet. With all the geopolitical ramifications included. I put my money on the Chitari invasion of NY as a cool entrance which would allow the epic scale of the invasion to expand. As well as the dark elves in London. These interactions could be left unexplained and something that would eventually reveal the wizarding world in a later more revealing event but that’s the idea.

Personally I feel Maves fell into the Dumbledore fallacy. Yes he is a child, but a child capable of causing a great amount of death and a clear willingly mess to achieve his goals at all cost. Him performing the crucio was enough to warrent a harder approach. He learned nothing there besides a clearer goal to become stronger and take revenge for the "humiliation" he has been caused. Now innocent people will die because one man who though himself wise because he knows the future of that world will enable a Dark Lord to fulfill his destiny of destruction and pain. Welp who cares, good chapter though, was a good read. Keep up the good work!

I would imagine that could come at a later arc, or the foreshadow one. Since the the novel so far has done a good job and ramping up the line up of foes. Which would include the celestials. Really excited to see how Harry learn from celestial tech and incorporates their biology.

This giant discussion around morality is quite strange In that, in the mind of the MC morality should only be followed and abided by if they believe karma exist. Otherwise what does good or bad actions matter in the grand scheme of the omniverse that the MC plans to explore. He who dare slay gods and transcend to become one. Being white, grey or black should only become a question/foil for the story if their are consequences for such action that are controlled by unknown and unseen factors. You can think of it like cultivation novels use the concept of karma and Luck to skew the scales of probability on a individual or group. In my opinion, the MC should be doing everything possible to be as "light grey" as possible. Obviously this creates restrictions and limitations on what he can do. But honestly what kind of person with the will and goal to explore the omniverse be so petty and short sighted to target children and cause suffering on the most vulnerable. Not because it's good or bad but because it should be beneath someone like him to do so. It's pathetic. I can understand when you are weak and desperate such things can be discharged. But their has to be a line here somewhere. So author its up to you to draw it where you think best.

#1 The World Online - MMO/Kingdom Building #2 Divine Throne of Primordial Blood - Unique Cultivation/Smart MC #3 Desolate Era - The Gold Standard of Cultivation Novels These will keep you busy for a while. I have tons of others, but these are the top 1%.

Just because people compared Dumbledore to Merlin in Canon does not mean he was at the level of Merlin. They Wizarding word simply used it as a title to refer to the strongest magic user of their time. Besides the phoenix familiar what great achievement has Dumbledore been shown doing that trumps Merlin, Morgana La Fey, or the Hogwarts Four in canon or otherwise? I think the author logically constructed a good base in terms of power levels of these characters. I personally would have liked to see the growth of the MC from Day one. However the novel is going to entirely depend on the future world the MC travels too. Since he has almost out grown the current HP AU. Author if you are reading this. Maybe as a beta test of traveling to AU of other fictions. Have the first jump be to the ancient past of the Harry Potter To the peak of magic in ancient times to learn those skills before going to other worlds. That way it really fully squeezes out the HP AU.

Fictional storytelling inherently revolves around characters who are introduced and crafted for x purposes. In this case romance. Which some would consider an important and Impactful foil for any main character. How many legendary stories are crafted around a significant other facing a tragedy or twist of fate which changed the main character forever, for good or evil.