the MC doesn't know about dxd world why the author didn't say that I don't know the grammar is trash some key words are missing some parts make no sense then when you start reading you stop you realise why the f did I just read it make no sense my opinion is the author wants to write about attack on Titan since it's the hit couldn't so he insert it in the chat group are mostly useless since its member will probably will not coaporate sasuke kaneki it's obvious your usual edgy character that a 14years old girl will think of as deep not to mention the cheats are not specified at all just get me all yonko abilities which yonko whats the limit of them do you get the skills if their users and physical aspects too so much question the comes of from just two words overall not a recommendation

do the MC doesn't know the dxd world why didn't you say that from the start

this is your usual angsty MC trying to befriend Naruto with the usual start of being orphan don't recommend trash trash trash trash trash trash

what if you liked this fanfic what is have to do with me the author most likely wanted to go realism route then find it impossible if he wanted to go with the story so he striped hismc of common sense so he can write more of it so duh if someone doesn't like my opinion your free to go create your own website and poste there buddy no one said you have to poste on a public site if you cant take criticism also what this dick move of yours that you go and comments on a story that it was obviously dead just to get some petty revenge or something are you this pathetic get the **** out from my face trash

roue retarded or something read what was written I said this could be a way for him to earn his own money and stop relying on momo and her family if he wants to be independent man yet you tell me he can ask momo to make it for him are you an imbecile or something go learn how to read before you moron

yeah I was trying to go the details route it's been a veryong while since I wrote this I just uploaded here I thinki it's being alike 5-6 years since I wrote this one on fanfic either way thanks

trash very trash the author killed the MC parent just to make him have a sad background to let him become batman of the MCU very trash don't read the author keeps blabing about learning from his previous fan fic yet he seems not don't trust the other reviews the author obviously deleted the bad ones while the rest has come from his alt accounts

good god don't make him friend with the viper Rhody I don't understand why people like trash like Him his loyalty to military is above all else even Tony this will mean he will betray the MC did you even bother watch iron man movies the MC should know that

common this is trash he lost control then why did he even had the ability to control his emotions in the first place then you ruined the the timeline of the team rocket and zatanna wasn't on the team until season two which mean batgirl and beastboy should be here while miss martian should be going mad with mental powers then the MC becomes retard why even fight the justice League why risk things out of controll this whole chapters were trash just delete them continue with the X-Men evolution timeline better you just repeated what you did with the arrow verse in here but more bad this only shows that your running of ideas from the get go then your forcing characters out of the blue like Scott being an asshole while the MC didn't do anything to him or get closer to his one sided lover you seem also to be hampering the MC potential or should I say needing him Far too much he should've stayed with Xavier and trained his powers whole working on technology like recreating the Pym particles to store things while using quantum energy to create boundless range comm for his teammates which he will never share with them at all making algorithm and matrixes programs so he can get rich fast but slowly as every penny he has will be directly invested back immediately so no one knows cesat himself a new identities all over the world incase of emergency you can watch venom movie to try to Incorporate it as the professor decide to take them to San Francisco as there were the movie happen shield gets involved shenanigans happens he meets fury or one of his operatives then he allude to him being a mutate not a mutant and tell him to keep the secret fury agrees but on condition of him owning him which will the MC being involved in the avengers as a descised mutant then you go on bro thi sis just the tip of the iceberg or you can rewatch the underworld Series starring Kate beckinsale then incorporate it it's a clean slate one or do the events of spider man 2 the Rami ones as two takes after the graduation of Peter and mj so yeah there is some ideas if your running out

trash

very wacky and all over chapter you already made him very broken by given him all this then dropping him Harry potter world as the world is very weak and low tier the gamer mind and body is so much broken in low tier world's like this one you should retcon some of them or arleast make them come later in the story of you decide to make him travel around right now the MC is very very much broken

agreed it's like early Naruto without the flesh out world or entire concepts figured out for example the retcon of aizawa powers early on in the series

well that's a one way to look at it

so he just sold all his chances to move on now he will be indirectly be the slave of nice lie since the city lord will be grateful for him from the array events and the invasion then the solution of the city lord adopted son the MC destroyed himself and any future he has such a disappointment

see this is what I'm talking about you will break the MC too soon his abilities will sky rocket with out any good reason of it now your will be just introdung op abilities after another then need them immediately so you can write more instead of balancing the abilities from the get go your just figuring stuff as you go

so he chooses a trash one what he gonna do with an Uzumaki blood line when in later series everything except Sasuke and Naruto becomes useless you get nothing from it except higher chakra quantity which will leads to your Training becoming more hard then there is the slight longer life span that's it fuinjutsu is very overrated you will destroy your narrative of the MC power with it as there are nothing that explains it in the series except some seals appearing from time to time

what op about it it's completely trash you control your bones so what a powerful jutsu could destroy it

I love people like you thinkingh that the author will listen to them the author obviously will not do ithe is merely doing different novels to see who it stick so he can then make a patreon so don't bother he obviously restructuring some phrases after using Google translate do you honestly think that he bother too much with your opinion just go to lnmtl if you wants to read or something or Japanese lightnovel translation

your wanking him too much ease stop Madara was enjoying the fights he doesn't take it seriously so ease stop

then why say he needs to do physical inorder to get stronger please from now on write clearly your statement in chapters and comments are very confusing