Shouldnt the MC atleast try to get powers by touching the towers even if it doesnt work. If I remember right all Otherworlders gain them as gifts from the spirits when touching them.

This is Stolen Work from another site plus plugging his own patreon. FAKE AUTHOR . FAKE AUTHOR . FAKE AUTHOR .

I'll be happy with any female lead as long as she's not a OC like his goddess.

Keep it the way it is

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Pretty sure its impossible for the Gods of Danmachi to have children in the first place. The world itself rejects them so in the end the other way for the them to have children was the whole falna system.

should be pointed out that even if you missed your period does not mean you are pregnant. Can Afton even get a regular human pregnant? Gotta admit this is 100% forced an only really makes the reader hate Josie.

I think your too worried about not making a perfect character that your hampering your character for no reason. There's a difference in not wanting your character from being perfect and not learning from repeated mistakes. Even a handicapped monkey learns from their mistakes faster then the protagonist.

At the end of the day you shouldn't be posting any story that you didn't write or translate without the authors permission. Doing this usually ends with the actual author abandoning the story.

Can you please stop with the whole Alex is secretly "ripping off" franchises, might have me alittle funny the first time but it got old really fast. The odds that their are so similar franchises in this one universe is so low that the only way its happening is for "Plot".

Will admit that this romance doesn't feel like it adds much to the story, an doesn't feel necessary.

Personally the gay stuff wasn't what was bothering me, if you wanna do gay stuff go ahead. My problem is the whole chapter felt like you was pushing for stuff to happen even if it didn't make sense to actually happen.

This chapter feels 100% forced, and nothing really flows well.

Really disappointed that you still plan on pairing your character with ino.

bored out of my mind with this konosuba arc, hopefully we go back to the main character soon.

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Pretty sure you going with he has shared vision with his minions, Which is a pretty powerful ability for someone with a horde on undead. Keep up the good work.

Then whats the point in writing fanfiction? Because at the end of the day all the characters are out of character when written by someone other than their creator. And I wouldn't really call her more mature than the other girls rather slightly more experienced. You could easily replace what happened to her with any of the main cast and they would have the same "Maturity " as her.

Gonna be honest, as much as I like your story, the forced romance going on with the female oc is killing the story for me. For me it feels like she was created solely for the sake of not pairing your character with a canon one. I overall just don't find her interesting.

Gonna be honest the first few chapters of this story had a lot of potential, the last few chapters have greatly killed any interest in the story. They add nothing to the story.