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Thank you for the chapter It would have been a lot better to hear Scorpio’s complaints and Jason’s reaction a few chapters ago. Not only is the payoff more satisfying, it makes more sense chronologically and prevents what feels like a retcon. I mean give this problem some time to exist and grow. It takes more planning but gives a better result (at least from my point of view)
Thank you for the chapter As for premium I’m sorry but I wouldn’t support you. There are simply other stories I prefer, and this story, while enjoyable, isn’t distinct/unique/interesting enough for me to absolutely want the next chapter. Sorry to be a spoiler, this was without mean intent
The protagonist just wants to live in peace, quietly becoming more and more OP, but pesky intruders keep bothering his residence. I wonder why? Maybe it’s the fact he is living as an eunuch as a retainer to a royal family member I really enjoyed this story. Probable not top tier, but I do hope it will be picked.
Ok so I’ve noticed something and would like to share it with the author : Jason is becoming a rather bland character In this chapter (and the end of the previous one) we have an embarrassing situation yet we never know what Jason is feeling, at best we can try to deduce it from what he says. But this makes the character poorer. Emotion are an unintentional visceral reaction to a situation, they aren’t supposed to be rational or deduced. Here I would have expected something like “ Jason felt embarrassed” or even better “The questioning gazes of his camarades made him want to drill into the ground” not even making the emotion explicit. This contrasts with the first few chapters, where we could feel Jason’s despair and this also contrasts with Artemis, who is full of character and emotions, and I suspect that this is due to the fact that she can’t talk, so this was done inadvertently. On the other hand, we mostly see what Jason does or says, not what he feels. Let him almost chuckle in a serious situation because of something humorous only he noticed, or have his emotions not be reflected in his actions. Sorry if this seemed harsh, I really just wish author can improve this Thank you for the chapter
Thank you for the chapter To tell the truth my favorite chapters are consistently the ones between arcs, like the rewards/consequences of a big fight or the decision of the characters at the end of an adventure since it’s often the world building + character building chapters. All that to say, this chapter was fine by my books, far from useless. The only downside are that these chapters are often less dense but since the chapter was longer this wasn’t a problem. Thanks again 👍
Thx for the chapter I think the pacing for this chapter was really on point, the action was easy to follow and the rhythm was good My only complaint would be that I don’t like Asthia getting beat up(hurry up Jay) but that has nothing to do with the writing, if anything it proves the writing quality 😉