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In a display of excellent acrobatics, Yasuo jumped and twisted his body in mid air before landing a bicycle kick that launched the ball straight into the corner of the net.- Grimace2yrReplied to ludivine_LABOURGCh 4 Chapter 4: Flowermore
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No, just a coincidence
-Magma Breath (Active) - Grimace3yrCommented
I think it would be more accurate to say she has sub-quirks. In the series you can see this with a lot of people. All Might has super human abilities, but his OFA also gives h transformation abilities. Bakugo has resistance to various effects that can be produced by explosions, but that's not his quirk. There are a lot more examples, but you get the idea.
The 3 started to panic but the black gate opened in the room again. Instantly snapping all their attention to the gate the first thing they saw in the black void like the gate was a pair of glowing white eyes. Then Kaguya came out and she had a book with her. The 3 adults rushed over and bombarded Kaguya with questions mostly asking is she alright. Dr.Chiyo interrupted Yuki and Haru and asked Kaguya what was that gate. Kaguya responded with "A door." A door the 3 adults thought at the same time. Yuki then asks "Kaguya what do you mean a door?" Kaguya didn't want to reveal how she opened it but she wasn't going to lie either so she said "When I thought about reading my book it just appeared." Noticing the book in her hand Yuki said "That's the book I got you for your birthday." "Your right it is" Haru agreeing with Yuki. Yuki then asked, " Did you really just go home to your room and grabbed the book." Kaguya nodded yes. The 3 we're shocked that Kaguya can teleport. Dr.Chiyo then said with excitement "You lucky girl you got a forth quirk!" After 3 the calmed down Dr.Chiyo called the other doctors to report her new findings. The doctors we just as shocked Kaguya has the ability and it was teleportation. - Grimace3yrCommented
I agree, seperate your paragraphs. You should end a paragraph on scene changes and topic switches to make your story easier to read. This is more down to your writing style, but I think you should seperate dialogue from everything else. Even when someone is skimming through your story they can easily figure out what's happening without having to read blocks of text (helpful for editing too) based on the context of the conversations between characters.
Yuki immediately getting up and waking the sleeping Haru they followed. As soon as they got into the room Yuki rushed over to Kaguya who was sitting up in the hospital bed looking at t.v and hugged her snd started checking her for any injuries or bandages. "Don't worry little Kaguya here is just fine," Dr.Chiyo said. This brought relief to Yuki and Haru. Then Dr.Chiyo explained everything that happened during the test. "Like I said before she is perfectly fine it's just that her quirks gave us trouble we did tests on her." "Quirks?" both Yuki and Haru said at the same time. Turning to Kaguya Dr.Chiyo and told her "Kaguya you have 3 quirks, you lucky girl." Turning back to Yuki and Haru Dr.Chiyo got back on track and said " Yes your niece has 3 quirks. The first one is that she can move her hair on her own like it's another limb and we encountered this when we tried a blood test and we couldn't penetrate her skin so the nurse pushed harder unconsciously then her hair even though she was unconscious moved on its own and picked up the nurse. Luckily at this time Kaguya woke up and put the nurse down. Her second quirk which I read about in the report that I got that had got which had details you told one of the other doctors what happened before you two brought her is her eyes. She asked can she name it so we let her. She called it the byakugan. When we ran a test on it we got some knowledge about it." "What did you find out about it?" Yuki asked. - Grimace3yrReplied to SAIKO
Where did you hear this? I'm almost 100% sure she is just old.
(A/N: This is Recovery Girl's Granddaughter) - Grimace3yrCommented
out of nowhere*
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This comment made me laugh.
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I included the point about checking if the baby is okay because this method was used in the past to test if the baby was responsive. If it didn't respond to getting slapped it would usually mean something is wrong with the baby, which can be anything from damaged nerves, messed up brain, death, etc.
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Why do authors always write the baby getting slapped after birth? No one actually does this in modern day. 1. Can be seen as abuse by the mother/father who are in physical and emotional pain, and quite hysterical at times. 2. This is set in modern day. They can easily check if the baby is dying, even without fancy machines. 3. Why would you want to make a baby cry? They are so annoying and now you have to listen to a baby cry for and iit's our fault.
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this was unexpected
You tried to groan, but all that left your throat was a low rumbling sound, something that would be more at home coming from the mouth of some kind of beast. - Grimace3yrReplied to uSeer
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why do you keep calling him quirkless when it's from the villains POV? To an outsider he obviously has some sort of quirk.
Kirei, who saw this display, cursed his luck as he never thought a Quirkless nobody could actually be a murderer. He didn't wait for his buddies to follow him as he made his way towards the exit as fast as he could. - Grimace3yrCommented
How would they know he's a robber if he's dead?
The next day came and it was on the news about a villain with a scythe that kills in cold blood. Kira noticed they didn't say anything about the guy that was killed is a robber but he didn't dwell on it as he continued his daily missions but as he noticed his level being higher than before, his daily mission increased in kind as well. - Grimace3yrReplied to JUST_A_NORMAL_GUY
That's fair. I just think it's been awhile since then and he's experienced a lot with them, so he should know at least a small amount what they think about him.
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Pog
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Don't do a timeskip if you're going to immediately do a flashback.
*Flashback*