It started well, then he comes to me with this stupid dialogue typical of a Chinese MC...

4 ou 5

Vou passar dias fazendo uma lista não kkkkkk

Aceito sempre boas ideias.

It started out well, but now it doesn't please me personally anymore. First, are you using cursed energy like chakra or ki, rasengan, genjutsu and cero? It kind of doesn't make sense to me, the only person who used something similar to this was Rika, in the film, a concentrated blast of cursed energy. Secondly, ROB's presence wasn't funny, in fact, it was a bit demotivating, and what's the point of increasing energy reserves if he was born with high energy reserves... Adding things like the tree after starting the story is pretty boring too. The author writes well, I'm being very critical, a side effect of reading fics for so long, you just want high level and not something so open. Thank you and good luck.

I'm confused with the timeline, Megumi, was supposed to enter school just a year later than Maki, Panda and Yuta, so the events of film happen. If I'm right. why is the author including Nobara and Megumi, as if they were already going to write each other at school?

Só tenho duas obras, a da marvel e da DC, não sei pq essa obra não aparece no meu perfil.

Mal? ah, devo seguir então apenas o pensamento da mídia, que o retrata como mal? Mas Zeus é mal também? Que dizer, ele estuprou muitas mulheres, isso quer dizer que a Diana, também deveria agir parecido? .......

What's the point in causing pain if you're going to change his memories? The author did this just to use this magic... how boring...

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I really liked these 3 chapters, I only have one thing to say.1- Please separate the lines with paragraphs, putting them together like this makes reading confusing.Keep up the good work!

In my animation I didn't see the last part properly... the dementors ran away... they are out of action, MC patron, it's boring...

The best part ends, please author, show a little of the power of the MC, this is the perfect chance.

Ele não foi nerfado, mas tem uma diferença entre lutar numa cidade cheia de habitantes e no espaço......

What does it matter if you put up a good fight if you're not going to expose this to anyone, I've said this before, one of the things expected from a fic is a little attention to the MC's skills. And now he won't play in the match, I don't remember if it was in this game or the next one that the Dementors attack Harry, which is a good moment for the MC, to show his patronus to everyone.

Sim, falei disso nas notas do cap anterio Obrigado pelo aviso.

Ele é bonzinho demais com os irmãos.......

Yes, and more.

Sério, tem que resolver logo essa história de ladrão antes de ir para o outro lado da muralha, é algo pequeno já comparado com oque ele fez, resolve logo....

Luffy? quer saber, só vou ignorar