Blade0

Love the idea of the fic and the execution as well. -1 stars because some of the dialogue is written with broken English (stuff like "what a luck" instead of "what luck"). Kinda breaks immersion for me but if you can deal with that then I'd suggest giving this a shot. The rest of the story is fine though, just the dialogue kinda sucks which is pretty wierd.

Yeah I noticed that too. Dialogue seems to be written by someone whose first language isn't English while the rest of the novel is fine.

Like he's more villainous than the deep? Cause that's what I'm here for.

Are you dense? Your tag literally says #villain for your novel when your protagonist is clearly someone more hero inclined (literally states he wants to save innocents, it doesn't get more CLEAR than that). I search for stories with the villain tag because I want a villain protagonist, not some goody-2-shoes. If your story didn't have the villain tag it wouldn't have even popped up in my search. Don't false advertise anything PERIOD. Shouldn't even be something I have to say out loud. You would get sued if it was a paid product.

This ain't realistic for an original novel. Heck even most translations don't do 30-50 for 10.

Gotta dip here. please change the villain tag. It’s false advertisement and made me just waste 30 min reading 10 chapters to find out the mc is a good guy

Agree with the other guy about staying in city and the prem. Already a bunch of stories out there about Barca/Real Madrid players. Haven’t seen one play for city yet.

That makes sense. Didn’t know about the comparisons.

True dat

There’s no raw, this is an original. You think translations are going to be this high quality?