Love it. Glad to see that this story hasn't been forgotten.

I just binged this story and I was so sad when I got to the end because I expected there to be more. 😭😂🤣 Keep up the great work 😁👍

When I read "I was board." It had me rolling! I love it!😂🤣

Yeah, I am done. This story getting a little too stail and inconsistent for my taste. The power scaling is off and there is not much change or sense of consequence to Peter's actions. The thing that always makes Spider-Man relatable was the Parker Luck, the bad luck that always comes up whenever he is doing well in life. Be family drama or villains, nothing can always go your way 100% of the time no matter the prep time or planning. That goes double for scaling up Peter's powers as well, as more powers means more responsibility and I am seeing none of that here. I understand the power fantasy, but I am not on this sight for that.

I am all for the teaser at the end and the whole daughter thing, but it could have been handled differently to make more sense. Such as later if life so that the whole emanation thing wouldn't have been an issue. You were also planning for an A.I. assistant that was better than Tony's, so how did it turn into a daughter? That just came out of nowhere for me. I would have personally wait until after the college bits before introducing a daughter, even then I would have gone for something a little more cannon to the Spider-Man comics. As I remember that in one comic, I can't remember the which off the top of my head, that Spider-Man is brought to a hospital in the city to help a dieing little homeless girl. Since she had no family, the hospital thought to call in Peter because the box she was living in was filled with Spider-Man themed stuff. But sadly, in the end there was nothing he could do for her. I would have had her cured, join the family, named her Peni Parker and gave her a Spider-Man themed mech-suite capable of riveling Stark tech. Yes, this would be a version of the same girl from the comics and movie. Anyway, keep up the good work. I am looking forward to seeing what will come after the family bits.

I have been looking forward to seeing when you would get back to this story. It has to be one of my favorite Mass Effect stories I have seen so far. I hope you will keep up the amazing work.😁👍

I would definitely say that you make individual pieces of equipment, weapons or even accessories as conduits for the stones. While Reed Richards plans for the Council of Reed's and the Illuminate fell through in the comics, it was at least better than letting the stones fall into hands not capable of using them properly or would use them for evil. This way there would be 6 powerful individuals wielding the power and not just one. A person, especially a human, with absolute power without the resolve to use it properly will just become a slave to that power. On the other extreme we have superman, he has infinite potentual power but he only limits himself to below 1% of what he should be capable of. I always thought that brining back Nemesis and the Ego stone or even the individual consciousness of each stone was a better option than just letting the stones float freely through the universe. That way there would be a new cosmic being/s for that universe that would insure the safety of the stones and even help maintain the balance of that universe they are in. But if you would like my ideas, these are all off the top of my head without much thought. Soul stone: scythe or katana, as it would fit a while grim reaper agent of lady death thing for deadpool. Reality stone: necklace for Wanda/Scarlet Witch to help with her whole power set and chaos magic. Space stone: Tony, Peter or quicksilver. Tony because he made interesting use of it in the comics by using it to power his core reactor. Peter because he could use it instead of just portals. Quicksilver just to make him the marvel version of the flash. Mind stone: An accessory for jean gray or professor x, for obvious reasons. Mainly jean so that she could learn to control the phoenix. Power stone: Thor, doctor strange, hulk or drax. Thor to enhance his godly power further. To power his magic instead of needing the connection to the dark dimension. Hulk to become the breaker of worlds. Drax so that he could actually kill Thanos himself for having his family killed. It would also fit with why he was crated in the comics in the first place. Time stone: quicksilver or peter. Quicksilver because of the same reason for the space stone, but probably more fitting because the speed force is basically a form of time manipulation. Peter could use it to always have an advantage over his enemy out side of his spider sense.

Yeah, Reven is going to be sincerely disappointed with how modern Jedi fight. 😂🤣

I have just finished from chapter one yesterday and i am hooked. I just find it sad that Neo's biotics hasn't been developed for several chapters. Almost like it is being neglected in favor for his tech at the moment just to show off how overpowered it is. I would also like some clarification on why Neo has forgotten that he was told that Tali liked him as more than a friend. I could understand avoiding the subject with his constant training and tinkering, but not completely forgetting the conversation when his whole deal is learning from new experiences, essentially a perfect memory and sensing other peoples emotions.

This has been a very interesting read over the past couple days. Not only are the characters well written, but the development of the main character is ver entertaining. I have noticed a couple hanging plot threads that have not been properly addressed and some obvious grammer and punctuation flaws, but it is an otherwise great story.

Rule one of self-insert fanfiction, never under any circumstance do you revile that you are from another world/universe. It causes too many problems. First and foremost, the OC is in a universe full of some of the most powerful telepaths and magic users in fiction. Meaning they have the potential to pull out the secrets from his mind. We have already seen that he is vulnerable to this with that guy that manipulated him before to take over his body. While he is training with man hunter to make his mental strength stronger, that doesn't mean much when it is perhaps one of the weaker versions of the character. Now that Kara knows of this, she could spill the beans without knowing it just by walking around. It has already been an established fact that the super family can be manipulated by mental attacks. While they are resistant because of how their powers work, but they are not completely immune until they reach their full potential.

Break him slowly. I would say cut off his limps bit by bit and burn them closed so he doesn't bleed out, but that is my sadistic side talking. Make the dual a public affair to show everyone at the sect their hypocrisy before the big revealing of Master Lin. You could even do a grand show of it with breaking down the boy both physicality and mentally during the fight. That would kill two birds with one stone for this arc.

I loved the Broly story you did, but i feel like this one is still missing something. For example, you could have had the oc captured by Mongul and forced to fight on warworld. Not only was it someplace that superman has been captured and taken to by Lobo if i remember correctly, it also seemed like a more fitting way to spend the 10 years held in captivity. Anyway, keep up the good work and i will be looking forward to the next chapter.

I have just read this story and I have loved every second of it. In a lot of ways it reminds me of “The Spider” by I'mjusttryingtofindmyway on Fanfiction.net, but I would say that you have a greater potential for your own story here. Both are top class fan fictions, but you my friend are more detailed with a characters development in the story and I am loving that. It is perfectly understandable that you would take a break if you are having some personal troubles at the moment, I just hope that things work out for you soon and you find your inspiration again. It is always some of best stories that end fare too early, I hope that is not the here. Good luck and and best wishes.