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Veridor1yrReplied to VeridorCh 36 Chapter 36: A new mage- Veridor1yrCommentedCh 36 Chapter 36: A new mage
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tilted*
"It's just too lonely without him, you know?" He said to Moon who titled her head puzzledly. - Veridor1yrCommented
Don't give cats milk, they are lactose intolerant. They love the fats in it, but it is bad for them
Moon, seemingly happy with the house fairy moved to the glass and finished the milk with a satisfied expression on her face. Soon after, the house fairy disappeared and the glass and plate began to float in the air. - Veridor1yrCommented
Bathroom? I mean, brushing your teeth and showering in the toilet sounds a bit... weird.
Scratching his head, Lucien forced himself into the toilet. He washed his face, brushed his teeth, and hopped in the shower. - Veridor1yrCommented
are we talking about in game time or real life time (thinking about the monthly allowance)? If you think about it, payment in rl time would be way too low to make a profit in game, while in game time would make you rich just by playing a few days straight.
Operating a guild was good business. Top twenty guilds have special perks from COVENANT like 20% off all items in the shop, extra boost from rewards, and a monthly allowance worth thousands of millions in gil, among the many others depending on your guild's standing in the leaderboards. - Veridor1yrCommented
Just a passing thought: never too old to learn ;) But this is beside the issue, people should not comment on others trying hard to write a good story in a language that isn't their main one. Certainly when they try to improve themself.
If you guys really mind helping me fix it then please don't say I have to go to language school like some people before. Do you think at 42 years old with a wife and two kids I still have time to go to school again? - Veridor1yrCommented
You did achieve what you were after, the interactions between family members/different noble houses are stiff and akward. I had more trouble with the random perspective changes during the conversation of the engaged couple.
Conversations in this chapter were pretty stiff - I know. I was trying to make it so that their interactions are awkward but I think I messed it up. - Veridor1yrCommented
in other words: flashback
**Before the Present Day** - Veridor1yrCommented
I guess with the new story, this one is probably forgotten. I would have liked some updates, even if it's just once a week, or a clear message what he's going to do with this story. I really liked it when it was being released, I even re-read it while he was gone for a few months. But you can image my dissapointment when he just starts releasing again to just getting my hopes up and stopping after 2 chapters (Meanwhile anouncing a new story). I'm sorry for the rant guys.
Ch 174 Chapter 170: The Magical Russia - Veridor1yrCommented
I could understand if maybe its the trauma of "survival training" she had to go trough while traveling. Also, some tribes/cultures have a very unappetizing food culture ...
Dora didn't know what was going on now. What was she supposed to do with the egg? Eat it? She'd just recently turned vegan. - Veridor1yrReplied to Unrelated_Poster
Second read?
This body is weak and skinny, it's not nearly as bad as Harry's. I should be able to handle school bullies. I know basic hand-to-hand combat. My uncle was in the army, go figure. - Veridor1yrCommented
That gotta hurt, you know in movies, they use powdered duct tape, because the adhesive side is way too strong. So I guess she does not have much skin left around the lips...
Seeker used the knife to masterfully slice off the excessive tapes on Alean's mouth. And he ripped the last piece of duct tapes to reveal Alean's mouth. - Veridor1yrCommented
1700 feet/sec = 518,16 m/s
The world slowed down in Seeker's perception. An average bullet travels at the speed of 1700 feet per second. Seeker was only 8 feet away from Charles, and at that range, it would've been certain death. - Veridor1yrCommented
this is getting very pink 😉😏
He reached a hand out and stroked my cheek with his thumb, "Your wolf is gorgeous. I've never seen golden fur like that before. I've only heard about in stories of the kingdom wolves." - Veridor1yrCommented
Nope Anora is just as fast in getting over the death of her mate...
I reached down and grabbed my leggings. I slowly pulled them up my legs. Then I put my bra and shirt back on. I glanced back over my shoulder to see if Travis was finished changing and I caught a glimpse of his bare back. His muscles were refined just as you'd expect an Alpha to be. I turned away and blushed. I tried to push the image out of my mind. I couldn't believe I even did that. I finished putting my clothes back on and sat up on the fallen tree. - Veridor1yrCommented
shook*
Gregor rolled his eyes and shock his head, "You're hopeless!" - Veridor1yrCommented
newcomer* one word
Then, the sound of paw steps alerted the two wolves. They booked looked up at the same time, trying to spot the new comer. Gregor stood up and walked in front of Lady protectively as he looked around. - Veridor1yrCommented
I got the feeling Lady got over the death of her mate quite fast... wolf instinct?
"I'm Lady, you must be Travis's wolf." She wagged her tail happily. - Veridor1yrCommented
What happens to the clothes? Maybe its just tedious to keep writing it down. I remember reading that at the attack they got destroyed by turning, so I can imagine them changing out of them if they have more time.
I stepped behind the fallen tree and started to let myself take a breathe before lowering myself to the ground. My skin pricked with excitement as I could feel myself turn.