Doesn't she have white hair..?

I sincerely doubt he would "light up in excitement" or roll his eyes with the amount of blood loss and pain he's going through..

Really? I'm having the opposite issue, all MC's eventually just turn into asshole murderhobos. Antihero is fine, but please don't make the MC an asshole.

Yee nah, this is freaking hard to read. Use Grammarly or something, please. For now, it's a pass.

Your grammar is very, very good so no worries about that.

It's not just that. The fact that she immediately blushes from rando compliments from a mage... A very experienced charm user and cold hearted killer blush at a compliment on the very first meeting? And not choosing to run when said mage uses her SCP identification number as well? It don't make no lick of sense my dawg.

I'd be happy as long as MC doesn't turn out as a generic murderhobo villain. I'm so tired of villainous leads.

Why would you change it? It's dope so far, your writing is great.

Yeeeeeees!! Please don't abandon this one!

Loving this story, cheers!

Bwahahahaha! This is hilarious bro

If the story continues just like this with the same quality this is going to be a baller story, cheering you on author. Please don't stop writing this!

Planet..? Isn't this a medieval society?

Interesting, well written and fun to read. Recommended ✅️ ◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇ ◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇◇ ♧♧♧♧♧♧♧♧♧♧♧♧♧♧♧♧♧♧♧♧♧♧♧♧♧♧♧

This is the edited version..? Oof..

Yikes....

The plot would be somewhat interesting if not for the atrocious grammar, the rather apparent lack of editing, character decisions that make no sense, and how forced everything is.