Mehrtin

Ugh... Another devil mc, nah this aint for me. Good luck with your story pal.

I don't think it's good enough honestly. All the characters feel so stiff, and it feels like you're missing core characters traits like Fury's rampant paranoia. Not to mention him starting his report to the council on something that's relatively minor in the scheme of things as of now. There's a lot of small things like this that is easily fixable, but I think it's all but confirmed now that you're churning out mid at best chappies with ChatGPT.

Fury would never say this bro. The hell kinda Fury is this?

The reason I ask if you use AI is the shift in how characters spoke after one of the earlier chapters.

I really like what you've written so far, but one critique I have is it doesn't make much sense for everyone to be so formal with their language, except for the nights and the king of course. Idk if I've been tainted by the marvel movies but I thought Fury would've been written more crass, or a lot more casual but serious if that makes sense? Do you use AI?

As of chapter 12, well written, well paced and interesting. Dark and gritty with a touch of hope. Pretty hyped for this one, as long as the quality remains consistent it will be a banger boys. Recommended.

unfortunate, it was actually quite a fun read with good grammar which is a rarity on this awful site. guess we'll see you.. never? authors rarely return when they do stuff like this. i wish you luck on your future endeavors.

This story is dope, I love it! Main char is such a fun guy :D

Doesn't she have white hair..?

I sincerely doubt he would "light up in excitement" or roll his eyes with the amount of blood loss and pain he's going through..