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  • Falsic
    Falsic10d
    Commented

    Thanks for trying.

    Ch 1 **AN: Official Notice**
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    Inverted World (Dropped)
    Anime & Comics · NovaAias
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  • Falsic
    Falsic14d
    Commented

    Only rewrite it if that’s what you really want to do. Rewriting is hard as finding the motivation to redo something you’ve already spent hours on is really difficult. It’s easy to burn yourself out.

    Ch 14 **AN: Okay Real Talk
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  • Falsic
    Falsic24d
    Commented

    I see what you’re going for here. The problem is that you’re trying to reap a harvest without planting any seeds. There’s just no foundation for the payoff of this moment to evoke any sincere emotion.

    Ch 5 Chapter 4: We're Not Alone Anymore
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  • Falsic
    Falsic1mth
    Commented

    Aww... bashing. Gotta love it.... Wouldn't it make sense to see the Great King Faction bribing the MC, a valuable member of their fire power? You know, give him something he values but they don't. Considering how easy desertion is in DxD, the behavior here doesn't reflect a good politician. There's no incentives for the man to remain loyal, especially when the evil piece system lacks restraints and his mentors own personal power. No offense, but all you've shown here is that you believe politicians as theoretically cut-throat as devils are man children.

    Ch 39 A New Resident at the Alaverus Estate
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    High School DxD: Scattered Cherry Blossoms
    Anime & Comics · SixthSense1029
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  • Falsic
    Falsic1mth
    Commented

    I recommend making sure the app you're writing in has a cloud-based auto-update.

    My stupid phone just crashed and the chapter I'm writing disappeared. I also caught a cold and my eyelids are drooping. So, I don't think I can rewrite the chapter. Don't worry tho, I'll rest well tonight and upload two chapters tomorrow. I'm really really sorry guys.
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    Brand New Life In Naruto World
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  • Falsic
    Falsic1mth
    Replied to Lambhendelta

    Do what makes you happy. If it's continuing this story, do that. If it's writing something new, that works too, and sure, I'll give it a try if that's the case. As for advice, I'd recommend picking a set of ideas/plot points and committing. Thinking back, most of the problems I had with this novel was on how you rarely followed through. You were too busy putting in new seeds to water the ones you'd already planted. You never gave me, as a reader, a good reason to care about a single candidate beside the MC. You introduced a lot, but never focused enough on one or two. If I were to give an example that'd illustrate a working model, I'd point to the original DxD. If you look at it on a macro level, it's not very good or consistent, but that's not what it's focusing on. At least before Trihexa, Ishibumi focused on setting up character problems and paying them off shortly after. He didn't stall or hold it over people's heads. Xenovia is a good example. She's not very likeable at first and becomes a fan favorite by the next volume. Issei, as much as he irritates me, grows in every arc in some way or another, whether that be from resolving his personal traumas to establishing a relatable resolve to excel in battle. Say what you want about Ishibumi and his obsession with his new brand of super OP villains, but he knows how to make people like his characters. Anyway, I hope that helps. Good luck in whatever you decide to do. Just keep in mind, write it to have fun for you, not us.

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    Seraphim Princess of DXD
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  • Falsic
    Falsic1mth
    Commented

    You know... instead of explaning his power level in detail, you could just show us. Increasing parameters by 40% doesn't mean anything without context. If you were going to give percentages, that would make more sense later when we as the audience have a defined point of reference on just how powerful he is in combat. Giving X-rank doesn't help much either by the way. It's DxD. Power levels are both relative and fluid at best.

    Ch 8 Promotion Leads to a Traumatic Experience
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    High School DxD: Scattered Cherry Blossoms
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  • Falsic
    Falsic1mth
    Posted

    It’s a frustrating read. The author drags on the characters problems for up to 66 chapters at the point l dropped the book. They weren’t even hard problems to deal with either, just something that the author takes great joy in throwing in your face. To avoid spoilers, it’s like a Mc in a sports anime being fat and not doing anything about it for the equivalent of a whole novel… Yet in this, the main character’s entire design is one big nerf. Every part of her biology is designed to be weak and the author makes sure to rub that in your face while simultaneously making most characters too stupid to realize… somehow. Then it comes to the author’s lack of understanding of emotions. Just because a person doesn’t show emotions doesn’t mean they’re not there. Her sacred gear, in DxD logic should NOT be as weak as it is. Considering how influencing her previous struggles are on her psycology, well… I apologize for the negativity. Even though I understand what the author’s trying to do, the story just didn’t feel good to read. It’s like watching the first season of Tokyo Ghoul. I understand how it could appeal to some, but I personally don’t like that type of mentally ‘weak’ MC not having any improvement. Being weak is fine, but it shouldn’t take 66+ chapters to see positive change.

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    Seraphim Princess of DXD
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  • Falsic
    Falsic1mth
    Commented

    This is getting tedious… you’ve long acknowledged that she had a problem but just keep dragging it out for no reason. you just keep reiterating just how weak she is and not doing anything about it. It was cool at first, but it’s really gotten old. 66 chapters is a little much to just now be addressing such an overemphasized plot point. I’m kind of tired of the runaround, so I’m going to drop off this story myself. I just wanted to convey my frustrations before I did. Thanks for the story.

    Ch 67 Chapter 66 - Defeat of Angel
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    Seraphim Princess of DXD
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  • Falsic
    Falsic1mth
    Commented

    I would recommend not using a/n's so often mid chapter. I know the feeling of wanting to head off the criticism you know is coming, but footnotes work just as well without taking the reader out of the story.

    ...and here we are...while I was working on the novel, I realised there were so many mistakes and other stuff...and I had other good ideas as well...so....I have decided something....I am going to take down the normal one and re write...it will mostly the same but there will be some differences. So yea, I'm going to delete all the chapters and rewrite. I also completely understand if some of you have dropped this because of the long delay or are going to drop this because of this thing, It's my fault for taking this long, I will try my best in the future to be better. I'm really sorry for not posting stuff during these months and I'll try to post more chaps more often from now on. On the side note, I was thinking of making a discord server, hmmmm more thought needed on that but welp I'll leave it up to you guys. So yeah, this is it....Let's build a heck of a new and awesome community you guys. ; )
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  • Falsic
    Falsic2mth
    Commented

    You might already know this, but Azazel canonically ordered Issei's hit. Though, Ishibumi moved away from that 'dangerous' characterization later on.

    Ch 2 Chapter 7: Memory or Dream?
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  • Falsic
    Falsic2mth
    Replied to MisuAi

    It's Japan. Realistically, it would belong to the Shinto Kami. No matter what deal the Yokai make, the gods of that region would always have a vital stake. The real answer is that Ishibumi made Sirzechs and Ajuka stupid OP for no reason, so the devils have more latitude than they really should.

    Sona corrected Arata, "My sister and Rias' brother had managed to secure the city under our rule after the previous ruler, Cleria Belial, had died."
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  • Falsic
    Falsic2mth
    Replied to BigBud

    I mean... that's the problem with using MHA for fanfics in general. It's simply not done and most authors aren't trying to world build, even if the MHA world's setting gives them the latitude to do so.

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    My Hero Academia: The White Queen
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  • Falsic
    Falsic2mth
    Posted

    Basically, the author has a story in their head and summarized it for everyone else. It feels like they have a place in MHA they really want the story to reach and are rushing to get there.

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    My Hero Academia: The White Queen
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  • Falsic
    Falsic2mth
    Replied to Lambhendelta

    Yeah... people complain about DxD fannon B.S. while forgetting just how crazy canon really is.

    Ch 43 Chapter 42 - Logic vs Instinct
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  • Falsic
    Falsic2mth
    Replied to Lambhendelta

    One thing to keep in mind is that Rias's growth, in large part, is canonically tied to being exposed to Issei's boosted gear. She's not excessively talented naturally. Well, she is, but not to late DxD levels.

    Ch 43 Chapter 42 - Logic vs Instinct
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  • Falsic
    Falsic2mth
    Commented

    So you applied Rias's plot armor literally. Literally had Sona forget what dodging is and hit her with a super corrosive energy wave without life threatening injuries, an impressive feat of control. It kinda screams Mary Sue with how OP she is, but that technically describes the whole ORC post issei, so...

    Ch 43 Chapter 42 - Logic vs Instinct
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  • Falsic
    Falsic3mth
    Commented

    What was the point of this...? This 'natural rival' just seemed so... pointless. Vander's already heavenly dragon level and this just seemed like a convoluted way to give him a power up he didn't even need.

    Ch 47 Death of a Champion and Divine Protection.
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    Summoner of Dinosaurs in DxD
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  • Falsic
    Falsic3mth
    Posted

    The DxD part is interesting. The Marvel characters were made into idiots to fit into its verse though... If the Marvel part wasn't there, it would've been a really fun story to read. My biggest problem is the reduction of Natasha's personality. Her being less experienced or not, it just made me uncomfortable.

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  • Falsic
    Falsic3mth
    Replied to CarlosSalazar

    So... what's the problem? That sounds like a pretty standard hubris flaw, one to be addressed in the story.

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