Falsic

It's a new novel so it's early, but... my biggest gripe is how slow everything is. It wouldnt be an issue normally, but the first 16 chapters is 80% just re-telling DxD with no meaningful change. I can see the pathway the author is trying to lay, but it shouldn't take 20+ chapters to differentiate yourself from the source material.

Establish an outline of the events you want to happen and when. How long do you believe the conflict should realistically persist without unnecessarily dragging it out? Once the timeline is established, you'll naturally know whether a time skip is appropriate.

Please run your ideas through a Ai to correct your grammar. I'm sure you have a great story in your head, but I couldn't grasp your disjointed language here; I don't understand what you're saying. If I can't understand your words, I can't read your story. Hope you don't take offense.

It's written well enough. The problem is the novel reads like the author used heavy AI LLMs. You'll catch the 'he's not X; he's X' stated in 'profound' ways that don't sound human and are absolutely out of character. The novel also doesn't explore the very obvious internal conflict deku would have with a quirk less person who achieved his dream without a new quirk. It's just... a lot of wasted potential. It's also annoying how they mixed in Haki in a way that magically vanished when it absolutely would've been a documented phenomena that quirk less people would've held on to for dear life.

Not a fan of the style. Very wuxia-coded. The characters act like they're in a Chinese version of the Gotei 13. As for power systems... There are multiple 'stages' of shikai, reminiscent of sub realms in Wuxia.

That's how anime works

I reached 40

Ask yourself a few questions: 1. How would different governments approach superpowers of their own people and those of foreign nationals? 2. How would other nations react to nobles of a foreign power murdering nobles of their own nation? 3. In a political structure like the devils (power hungry, bloodline-focused nobles), how would they check and balance themselves from murdering each other, especially when there are 3 major factions internally and 2 historically war-like factions externally (heaven and grigori) to consider? These are not the only questions, but they should help guide the world building. Right now, your plotline plays out like everyone is happy to see the righteous lawyer obliterate their interests and assasinate their leaders.

The beginning is deceiving. The book’s less about action and mostly about smut.

It’s 20 chapters in and he’s still 2 years old. The story’s just a collection of raging angst stories of someone who clearly thinks he was an adult, but clearly wasn’t. It’s really slow and painful. The author isn’t walking us through his suffering; we’re crawling painfully slow. The good side is the exploration of how miserable quirk development can be for powerful quirks in childhood, but… there’s such a thing as balancing development and fun. This book isn’t fun to read.