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5.John Wick(Short Jump)- Spielmann1mthCommented
the story is good i like it. Do not change it^^
1. Continue the story as is. - Spielmann1mthPosted
The story title was first a little off puting but after reading 5 chapters, my first impressum is good. The writing quality is 1a. Easy to read and interesting writing style. No writing errors seen, when reading. Updates are good only a little slower in the last week. Story, Charakter and World are interesting for me. Like to read more^^
- Spielmann1mthCommentedCh 151 Chapter 151: Save people! Why do you force me to kill you, Neji!
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only sub plot. I hate storys in there the MCs plays pokemon
°Sub Plot - Spielmann2mthCommented
and the camera is functioning 300 meter deep, LOL.
Su Jing quickly let killer whale catch up and took out his camera to take pictures, feeling a little excited. - Spielmann3mthPosted
At the beginning the story was entertaining, but after 102 chapters it was just one repetition after another. It's always the same group of people in the Lists. So far 1 positive list and 3 negative listens. When you read the story, you quickly know that the author must have an EXTREME hatred for Doulu Dalu and really puts a negative spin on EVERYTHING. Hypocrite rank 9^^ Just because Tang-san lets other girls kiss him, he is the 9th hypocrite person in Doulo Dalu. WOW such a world must be absolutely perfect. Likewise, the people are written in 2 dimensions and are also distorted to the extreme, as if there are only good or only bad people.
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where and when?
"At the same time, the spirit hall hunting soul beasts is evil, and hunting soul beasts by himself is killing evil soul beasts. it is extremely shameless. And there is such thoughts in his heart that, He will encounter places that can improve his strength, He made up his mind to get it. But when he got it, he was worried that others would get it, and that people in later generations would get it, so he found an excuse to destroy this place." - Spielmann3mthCommented
correct
Tang San scolded: "This list of gods is made up in vain! Sure enough, it is deliberately targeting us!" - Spielmann3mthCommented
were would like to bet that "The Mausoleum" is this place and it is going to be bolted, ROFL.^^
Yu Yuanzhen firmly believed: "No accident will happen. It's very strange. I don't know why my son is bolted by lightning every time. In the mausoleum, Xiao Gang will be safe and won't be slashed again. Now Xiao Gang has already been turned into ashes, so Xiao Gang can no longer be bolted." - Spielmann4mthPosted
i was waiting with the review till the ranking was finished to see what is coming after but this is no story. Now a second ranking and after a 3th and then a 4th? Only writing a little canon from other storys and reaction BS bla bla, LOL. So i say the writing quality is 1 star for no quality, a story is for me more than a little words. Story Development 1 star. Story? what story? i see nix! Character Design same! I see no Design from a charakter. World Background same. A uterly useless story with no worth to read. I wish i have this story never seen
detailTop 10 Famous Death Scenes: The Death Of Kyojuro Rengoku At The Start!Anime & Comics · Nobody2NoBody - Spielmann4mthCommented
illogical BS, LOL! The Author is a idiot. The strongest Function of seastone is against Devilfruit user. How many Devil Fruit user has the world, against the number of normal Pirates. In the 4 Blues they people think Devil Fruits are a myth and not many know of them. So are normal Villagers really knowlegable about Seastone, i don't think so. Would be better and more efficient so sell better guns against normal pirate crews and not seastone, ROFL.
Ch 11 Chapter 11. Seastone's Impact: Umit, the Shipping King's Unconventional Business and Benevolence - Spielmann4mthCommented
longstanding, grins. Sorry but would it be not better when you change the word longstanding to big, heavy or strong. Then for the grievances to be longstanding (LOL) it would take months or years not hours, 1day max.
Luckily, Sarutobi Asuma of the Sarutobi clan had longstanding grievances with the Uzumaki clan. - Spielmann4mthCommentedCh 103 Ch-103 Connections to Sage of Six Paths.
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tried to
"His name is Kakuzu, the Ninja who once assassinated the first Hokage."