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The use of capslock for ephasising stuff is quite *******ish, but overall, the writing style is pleasant to the eye. The story itself doesnt shine with originality, at least from what I gathered from summary, since in the chapters there are it doesnt move that far yet. I can just see the growth of yet another revenge plot, and the way of MC's death is just weird, considering that it doesnt seem like its going to be explained anytime soon, even close to it, or even mentioned. But overdone doesnt neveccary meen bad, and the sprinkle of that secret-society mess that goes on is interesting enough to keep it fresh.
Writing quality is good, but could've been better. There are some typos and weirdly written things there and there, plus i'd say that the story would've benefitted from more and better descriptions. Plot-wise... it starts of with a bait and switches into infodumps, but fine, fine. It has originality as fantasy stories go, that I admit. But I think that there are too little of secondary characters introduced in a very short amount of time - it makes me confused with all of them.
A detective story, this is rare. A lot of things go on from the start, and it can become a bit messy, but between boring and messy I pick messy any day. Very exciting.
I will cut one star for the quality of English, because really. But besides this, it's a solid story, an interesting and exciting mix of cultivation and LitRPG, not something I'd ever seen before.
ah, no, the dank was entirely yours.
so this is what bothers you, and not the "dank" part? XD
I like this story, even though its imperfect. It shows a lot of promise. The way author puts details into the world around the characters makes it all the more engaging.
"Silva had shoulder..." instead of "Silvia had shoulder..."
No, it's 'sic' in a meaning of 'set (an animal) on someone'
Good grammar and spelling isn't something all books around there possess, but this one does, and good for it! There's also solid-looking system and a basic weak-to-strong plot, though on only five chapters its hard to say much about it.
More like "you chose this" then...
A solid shounen (young action) story, I like it! Can't say it's too original, but it's the good old familiar taste of weak-to-strong protagonist and his cast of snowflakes.
There's little to say yet, but I love what I read! The premise is fresh and original, and I'd love to read more soon! I can't way to see how the plot is going to develop.
I didn't actually read a lot of post-apocalypse stories before, but I will believe you if you say that no one else has bikes in their stories... After reading Zombie Sister Strategy and watching everyone driving on gas and shooting ammo that they got god knows where (six years into the apocalypse!), I really believe you.
Well, brain is a computing device in a sense, yes, but a more common meaning for 'computer' is a, quote, "an electronic machine that is used for storing, organizing, and finding words, numbers, and pictures, for doing calculations, and for controlling other machines". Emphasis on "machine". Bio-computers are not a part of that particular story, no :)