Nitrox2

This book need serious editing. It’s a shame. An IA could havé easily done it…. [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]

Pretty good DB fanfiction. It has great potential. One advise : the MC and your story must have a direction, a goal.

Some magic are lacking even though it appears in the original : Black hole (for gravity magic) and Gate (for teleportation magic)

The machine translation is shitty. With 0 editing, you will have a headache in 1 minute. Don't bother reading it.

After 3 chapter, I can confidently say the autor didn't read 1 chapter of Overlord. There is a big confusion in how work overall level, job level, increase in stat and skill point. How can you write a fanfiction on a work you don't know ? The inconsistancy and plot hole will show up extremely fast.

Typical case of a bad A.I translation without reading the translated text once...

The beginning of the story is well written. I hope the quality will continu in the future. [img=strong][img=strong][img=strong][img=strong][img=strong][img=strong][img=strong][img=strong][img=strong][img=strong][img=strong][img=strong]

You translation is shit if you confuse us with elite level and Elite trainer ... Change it everywhere. replacing elite level by advanced level should do.

Thanks for the chapter. What is the release schedule of This book ?

When did gastly evolve into Haunter ?