my opinion about story development was great, it just have bad writing quality ( i understand that this is your begining in writing, and i don't mind actually), it just too difficult to read for someone with mind for relax reading cause you need to give more effort to read the writing and understand the meaning of your word. keep your work sir author, cheer up🤗🤗🤗. Note : i will give my little suggestion for conversation, instead of write [system yes host] please use [system "yes host"] or you can use system [yes host]. so we can different between narration and conversation. thanks

ok, by your conclusion he get very much point by defeat he family but the question is the peacock was the one did kill many he family member & i don't even remember he become disciple (he doesn't a disciple yet so he kill he family will not give point to jiang yun). then if we assume it was true, he got much point then he upgrade his area to cover until thunder city region was impossible because the distance was too long(cultivator need half day to arrive from village), again if we assume that he got upgrade to next level and get some kind of clone, how much point it was needed. with my imagination and logic to how he get point in begining and converted point from mission/defeating, i can't thinking of reasonable twist.

i really want to drop this novel, but will do it after at least 150 chapter, if the story keep mess up again 😞.

just what happened with you dear author? ?? storyline was interesting at beginning, but now it totally failure. ho did jiang yun have power cultivation, how he can oiut from barrier. the most unreliable thing is, how he became so active, he just a normal lazy human in his territory, he will finished everything as fast as possible and back to his lazy daily life, right?

See this! I just gifted the story: Balloon