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This chapter doesn't make a single lick of sense. Hyuga Naori, AKA, nightingale, was literally present when HER DAUGHTER from another world, TOLD BOTH kyusei and kaoru that they were married and had a son in another world. Why is she acting ignorant now?? Is the author using chatgpt???

Self respect? Women don't respond to simps, they respond to guys that treat them like what they are. Trash.

Love the two chapters. Can't wait for more!

the running 'reason' for not using this to break the plot is that it's 'disturbing the dead' and 'inhumane'. The fact that such sentiments are honored by essentially child soldiers/child killers/rapist/murders/assassins / basically the incarnation of every evil AKA shinobi is quite laughable. But it's there.

Author tryna make reader relationship into on again off again girlfriend type ahhhhhhh.

Someone never learned to not kick ant nests till sure they won't get their foot covered in ants.

Chapters 80–83 suffer from a noticeable breakdown in narrative consistency, particularly in how time and urgency are handled. Earlier in the arc, the kidnapping of the protagonist’s parents is framed as an immediate, life-or-death situation. The writing strongly implies a narrow window for action, creating the expectation of urgent escalation and rapid plot movement. However, in the following chapters, that urgency is not maintained. Instead, the story time skips—roughly a month—during which the protagonist remains largely without meaningful progress or actionable leads. The narrative shifts into a slower, investigative rhythm, including detours such as seeking assistance from aligned allies. This creates a clear tonal and structural disconnect. The initial framing primes the reader for imminent danger and fast escalation, but the subsequent pacing and lack of developments suggest a much more open-ended situation. As a result, the stakes feel inconsistent rather than evolving, and the urgency established early on is effectively diluted. This isn’t necessarily a problem with the concept of a prolonged search arc, but rather with the failure to clearly recontextualize the stakes once the timeline expands. A clearer transition—either by redefining the nature of the threat or explicitly acknowledging the time-sensitive constraints—would have helped maintain narrative cohesion.

Thanks for the chapter! Can't wait for more!

why have you stopped posting on ff? E_E