The story seems to have a good foundation, but you need a proof reader. Proper nouns, names and places start with capitals Lath, Cain and Golden Dragon Academy.

… he is someone I saw potential in ..

Laith capital L.

Confused. The freedom Sect is not the same sect that Red, Zuo and the girls knew about. Because the Twins formed the freedom sect after being separated and traveling the realm of the Gods for a while. So how could they answer any questions about it?

And he destroyed how many bandits in a blink of an eye. ones you and your father could not. So tease a man like that and bring doom to your village makes so much sense because with his power if he says he is number 100, who would dare claim 1-99.

Just like a kid who doesn’t think that do his wealth and age, someone might think he was a fat sheep that needs to be eaten. Seriously ppl have killed for less. It scenes like this that make me think, if I become rich before I teach my kid to spend I would teach him common sense.

If you go to chapter 5 when he meets Rachel, she notice the reaction of the odd man. Also after he gets to the city in passing ppl think man. It keep confusing me, I am like is he a kid, teen or man. Also before he was crippled he says he was the 7th level of the first realm. But if he is 11 and achieved that wouldn’t he be a genus? If not what level are average cultivators at 11? So just me asking at this point what is his age?

Okay after 13 chapters I feel like I am reading conflicting stories. The MC in chapter one is 11 years, thus fact makes it understandable why the Wang family did not kill him since he was a child. But they still dumped him out of town, he spent a two weeks there before meeting Rachel and she calls him a man. And since then ppl refer to him as a man. Did him and Rachel travel for years and author forgot to tell us? The Wang family wiped out his family for a murder, now all of a sudden a kid from that family is the one they want. The timeline and background facts is really out of whack.

Unfortunately Mike is the only character whose character is believable. Spoiled young master with no ambition or charisma to under stand and read someone. Saya is a rich young woman raised to find a rich young man to marry and take care of her, while providing benefits to her family.

Scar is an idiot. And Ren even has the perfect excuse. Ahh I passsed it on regular and never tried any of the harder levels. You asked about how did I pass it and I told you. Beside according to Ren it is a 2 second difference how did he. It figure it out. I hope Leo tells Ren and Isolde everything and Ren hires Roz. Then go an a spree of first blood announcements. And I hope Isolde (sp?) gets the video from the restaurant and shows it to the world to make Lira fall from fame.

Crying and using magic might be best.

Thanks for the chapter, I must say that this chapter was unrealistic. 1) His mother's last words were not to leave campus unless an emergency happens so he pops off to lunch at a hotel. 2) Lam's family has not come up with a way to break the marriage with him, and she is acting so brazen, obviously there should be some fallout for her to make it clear she can hate him, but until the divorce behave herself. 3) Sister Qing might be adopted but her father is still the head of the Qing family one of the great 4, what their son or girl of a branch family would even dear look at her without worry that their family might be destroyed. 4) what father would let his weak support daughter go off to public school with no assistance or protection for her shelters private school life? How could he not talk to her about being at school with Kai? Not realistic at all.

Seriously, instead of blaming the child blame the grandfather that allows him to be corrupt instead of disciplining him. That is the one job of a parent, and they have all failed this child. So your solution is kill a 7 year old. I mean if he was 17, 27, 37 the thought might be valid but now. That would just be crazy. And worse that the corruption he wants to stop.

She is 5 years old, what does she know about how hard something like that is to come by as well knowing how to bond it. As I write this the Li sibling age bothers me, one is 5 the other 7, what parent sends two mortal kids (not even one stars) that age by themselves over a month away from home to get cultivation styles. With not enough provisions or protection on such a journey.

He is a monster. Jack was wrong but your sister was also stupid, she had food and a safe spot by herself all she had to do was stay put. But no in the middle of death and destruction she needs a book of humor. If she died it would serve her right. Jack should have been left there to rot, as a mercy because food would last how long! Who would recuse him before he died of starvation or zombie evolved and climbed up to get him. He was a dead man walking, not worth getting blood on your hands for.

This is very short sighted of him and shows his inexperience. Food will rot and go stale especially produce. With his space he should be trying to fill fresh food so later they can get seeds to plant and eat well. Also just because your not gathering other groups and governments/military will put procurement of food at their top priority. Also finding a stronghold(s) is also important. Also what about children, elderly can you truly walk away from innocence. Better for him to establish safe havens where he and his group can rest and protect. Without a purpose why keep fighting.