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Nevermind I thought he meant reveal the future apocalypse I was wr ong
This one is stupid
You keep repeating the word sense. I’ve seen it 6 times in the last 5 paragraphs.
Did he teleport to a clearing and why did he just stop in the middle of what he was doing to put the eyes in a clearing.
Broken bones in this environment without some magical healing or support from other people is a death sentence.
He let the creature go and got upset that the bear ate it and even attacked the bear and then said the bear stole his prey and tried to attack him.
How do you hammer out an imperfection with wood.
I don’t usually do reviews but I liked this story so I’m going to do one. First the translation could be better, there are multiple instances of wrong pronouns or different names. One thing that confuses me a little is that the story has a more western style like western names for everything but the city’s name is clearly not western. This isn’t too bad but a story should pick a style of name and stick with it unless there’res multiple cultures in the story and different names would fit the narrative. Second the world background is lacking, the reader doesn’t even know anything about the world other than he lives in a empire of knights with four duchies surrounding it even though Eli has lived there for three years with plenty of time to learn and multiple ways to relay it to us. These are things easily fixed going forward so I hope the novel continues because I do enjoy it and would recommend it.
these names
That’s not what irony means
He is different, he’s retarted