Spicy001

Keep writing and improving. Find your main story and the style you wanna use to tell it. Make the rest branches of the main story or details along the way. Also you dont need 10 ways to make your MC sound great and powerful. Just a handful of traits can make him sound great. No need for GOD mode either. 250+ points in every stat doesnt matter to readers when they dont even know what 25 stat points does. Same with all the SSS stuff readers dont even know what C class does. All popular heroes started from somewhere and were likeable even when they were weak... except One Punch Man aka Caped Baldy.

Its an average novel with ambition. The author seems to have read other novels in the genre at the very least. While the pool of knowledge is there, the struggle to tap into it and apply it to his own novel is obvious. So far (100 chapters) the readers will get get a half measure of good elements. Its enough for an entry level novel but not enough for anything serious. Setting: We know its in the Philippines and thats about it. The descruptions about apartments and streets are appreciated but its better to focus on the city, school, or environment. The dungeons get an intro description but are left abandoned right after. The novel cant decide whether or not its an academy setting or a dungeon explorer. The shift from classroom to dungeons or jungle or wherever makes the story seem like its about adventurers/explorers rather than students. The format of 1 day lesson then X days in the field doesnt sound like theyre students. Characters: The rule is Show Don't Tell. While the novel doesnt overly pimp the MC, it would simply be better to have him do things rather than have people descrobe him to his face or otherwise. He doesnt talk much? Then have him talk less and be straight to the point. Decide on the FMC's characteristics beforehand and plan it better. As of now everything about her seems like useless filler. The side characters seem useless too. They pretend to be mysterious but at the same time act like thuggish children. Lore: So far theres plenty of lore scraps being left around. Its not exactly a bad thing but given how the story is progressing theyre all pretty much meaningless at this point. The biggest issue this novel has is POWER CREEP. At first I thought the author would have the self control but that did not last long. Theres a numeric stat system + a letter Class system + a profession Class system + a skill mastery system... for now. Oh and thats without mentioning the production classes which are the alternative to the combat professions that have been the focus up to now. All of these so far were just used to make the MC look amazing. Its too much for the reader and apparently for the author too. The MC only has 1 spell and its usage has not been impactful or creative nor was there any significant need for it. It all boils down to bad Power Creep and lack of focus in writting. Speaking of Power Creep the MC has only awakened and is more powerful than the very people teaching him in school. This often leads to dead ends in writting. Rather than a real novel this reads like a creative outlet for an aspiring writter. Give the MC fake flaws which are easily overcome (poor and not likeable, not a bad person just not likeable to his peers). Meanwhile make him godlike (having ~100x the stats of the people around him). There are some fundamental fixes that need to be applied or this will end up like many other generic wanna be Solo Levelling novels. Its not SL but its going on the same direction.

Its good for the audience's taste, sure. For a more discerning reader its not. It was too ruahed and has no foundation. It seemed more like the author got bored of the brooding suffering dark MC. The author plays it like trauma and personalities can be turnes on then off depending on the triggers which is a shallow understanding of traumas and personalities. I judge this harshly because I had high expectations for the works of this author from the start of his novels. I quickly became disappointed. They start of well and pull the reader in deep and are very immersive then turn generic harem shounen. What a waste.

Not the whole general plot but a lot of chapters are definitely AI. Its the same with the other novels of the author. How many "he didnt have to" "not A not B but C!!!" "he/she owned it!" and other overly repeated fillers have you read? The story/plot hasnt made any significant movements for months. It takes weeks to describe scenes wherein people just look at each other and are left with their thoughts and impressions without even interacting. Theres only so much brooding and inner monologue one can do before it becomes autistic and the author's novels do them for multiple characters. In short a lot of the works of the author feel like AI. Do I have definite proof? No. A lot of things make me think its AI but I can never be 100% sure. What I am sure of is the quality has dropped by quite a lot and the output has been lazy for quite some time.

The way the AI writes this is like a child's understanding of trauma. The MC's trauma is only surface and is closer to a trigger rather than trauma. The trauma comes and goes whenever its needed. Its like theres a note that appears every few chapters that says "btw Im traumatized" Im happy, I made friends, I met with some royalty, I killed A LOT, I saw people die, I almost died A LOT... oh btw Im traumatized by certain royalty, I was falsely accused and sent to die, I got traumatized by the death of my friends, etc. Its like being reminded that you were scared of the dark when you were a kid but you have a job and a family now but since you were reminded you suddenly turn the lights on the entire house 24/7.

If you knew the words youre using you would know that "tropes" are elements of good writing. You sayying SL is typical doesnt state whether or not you agree that its childish. Then you say its not overused because its popular... Two or more things can be true at once. Overusage of tropes is not directly related to popularity. Shounen is a genre and there are thousands in the genre and a lot of them are popular. My point is SL sucks if people actually took the time and read it properly. No other character matters except the MC. MC has 0 personality or character growth. 0 plot or story. As for your good art, granted. Thats about the only thing SL has going for it. Even the music is only so so. The anime is carrying a lot of weight for something thats bland on a writing level.

Reread that portion at the start of the novel. That smirky flirty attitude came out of nowhere. It went from 0 to 100 in 1-2 chapters. He was first a wronged heir hopeless and bitter. Then traumatized by the death of his unit haunted by their killer. Where did his flirty, know-it-all, keep everybody guessing attitude come from? Its not like he gradually got it too, hes suddenly a different person. He didnt flail around trying different quirks either. He just chose that one and everybody went with it as if hes always been like that. I dont mean people are supposed to know the old him. I meam you dont suddenly become funny just because you want to or become flirty and attractive to women. All while comming from trauma. Kid > Army prisoner > Unit death > Army promotion > Master' death then leaving the army > Quirky Playboy??? The series flows well until the last point. The author just gave up his dark traumatized personality and shifted the novel's theme to a light hearted adventure without warning. He got someone punished and beaten for a piece of bread then suddenly became a generic know it all shounen main character.

At first I was irked by these pop culture reference drops. Now they just completely remind me that Im reading a web novel. Low stakes.

You know waaay back when the deep magic were written the rest of the world would get western movies late and rural areas would get them even later. Feels like that when the author drops these references.

Hello, I wish you luck with your writting. I think the biggest issue is dialogue. The content needs a little imorovement with connectivity, its hard to follow what the characters are talking about. Ethan's style of talking should be unique but when the banter gets going the characters end up talking like each other. everybody becomes a young fast talker using as little words as possible leaving everything vague. I like the novel so far keep up the good work.