Altelco

inched -> inches

*hopping

letting *me* turn into

pink fleshed if I recall

I really enjoyed reading this segment. It kept me reading and wanting more, occasionally bursting out in laughter. There are definitly a few spelling mistakes that can be corrected. I will most certanly come back and read it again.

everythung is gone .. Then ning asks if he wants the house taken with as well.

Some stars were coming towards or Some stars were moving towards moving and coming in this sentence are the same thing.

urther -> other?

They took turned -> They took turns

do you mean "The time dilation is about 1 hour to the 6 hours in the outside world