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Is Galacta (daughter of Galactus) a thing in this story?

I was going to read this story after reading a review that it’s no harem and no devil peerage, since I thought the author would develop the world and have better character development/interactions. But I guess that’s not going to happen. Massive power creeps ruin gamer fic. Honestly I think creat instance dungeon should not be a skill, since it ruins most stories.

Well I am going to start reading it, if it’s no harem and no devil peerage. DxD has an amazing world to work with, but usually it gets over shadowed by harem’s, or focuses too much on the devils (like in canon). I have no problem with a harem story, but usually it trains the story. The author would not have time to flesh out the characters in the harem, and the characters that are not part of the harem almost never get character development. As for why I am not a big fan of devil peerage fanfic, is that people almost always shy away from the darker side of devils. They are not human, and should not be treated with human standards. To them power is everything, and those in power make it hard for others to reach their level. And peerages are just a collection of slaves. There would have been much better systems to implement the evil piece system if they just wanted to increase the population. And it would have been done in a way that best supports the devil society. Allow high class devils to own a peerage is another privilege for them, yet people don’t treat it with the gravity it is due. If I was a human with a sacred gear or another skill a devil would want and they offered me to turn me into a devil, and I wanted to, I would write a lengthy contract, detailing what I my duties as, what my restrictions are, and what are the things that I am not willing to do. Then I would ask for the price of my service. Since I will be agreeing to be a slave. Of course the price would not be needed if the devil gives me more concessions in the contract. Sadly most fanfic treat a devil’s peerage as a *** slave harem.

I just started reading, and I recommend changing it from a master’s degree to a bachelor degree. It would make more sense. Or you can remove the jumping grades part. But that’s just a recommendation.

From what I understand this person, didn’t realise this was a cultivation story. And they hate them. Granted TODAG is a dead give away, thought proper acronym is TDG, but if you aren’t into cultivation novels you wouldn’t know. To be fair I know where they are coming from, apart from maybe 2 or 3 decent cultivation stories I have read, the rest are shit. It’s a repeating loop and the culture is just unrealistic. The way sects/clans behave in a world where a random wander can kill them all is super stupid.

I like MC fanfic, and I love skyrim crossovers. But I have a policy to not read any story on webnovel that spams words to reach the 15k words needed to get into the ranking. With an average chapter length of 1k-2k words it would take 8-15 chapters to reach that limit.

Your answer is not clear. Though I hope it is not a harem story, as those tend to have shallow character development.

Too long? Is there such a thing?

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Advice is purely that. Advice. It’s up to the author what they decide to do with that advice. If I like it I read and if I don’t I say thank you for the ride and stop reading. Feed back is an important part of improving. It doesn’t mean you need to follow everything or even anything people say.

Honestly this chapter was super disappointing. And I mean super disappointing. If he wants to have a one night stand then sure go for it. But it should not include things like saying you love each other. Plus the comment about pure blood seemed forced and just trying to point out that the woman was pure blood for no reason. I highly recommend editing the chapter. Change it portray the woman as being demanding. She wants to have *** and thus is aggressive about what she wants (not necessarily aggressive in having ***). Just non of that love crap since they don’t even know each other’s names. Also you should write something in the main story that hints at what happens. So if someone doesn’t want to read this chapter they know what happened. That is unless she wiped his memories. BTW one of the selling points of your story is that it’s not just a power wank where the MC gets shit out of nowhere. I can understand goblin scrip being dwarven script, sure it’s a bit forced but it works. And I can understand a Pure Blood lady finding someone attractive so she mounts him. But people don’t write it as if they are in a relationship it should be more primal and passion driven instead of intimate love making between 2 people who love each other. Honestly since the gotcha was added to the story it’s been dropping in quality. At first it was progressing a pt a decent pace but then it’s one big event after another and it feels somewhat forced. I can understand if you just want to rush with setting things up, but I highly recommend slowing down.

Can you add the link to the image here. You can’t copy the author’s notes. I am guessing this is 4th year HP. And maybe students start off later than 11 years old, or they mature faster because magic.

If you want to keep using the hatch’s I recommend limiting it to 1 item a week or 1 item a month for magical items. Otherwise he will quickly become a pay to win character. I mean if he raided a drug ring and sold the drugs he would have a lot of money. Or if he sold the shit inside the room of lost things in hogwarts. Since I am sure an item with a soul bound to it would sell for good cash, because with the right magic you can do a lot of things with a persons soul if it’s just lying around.

I would recommend slowing down the story a bit once you have him start teaching. You know show some character interactions. Anyway nice story. I just binged it and it was enjoyable.

If you bring someone over from Worm their reaction to hydra would be funny.

Sorry for spamming messages. But I keep forgetting to add something. Anyway the Buy/Sell system would make him almost insta OP due to the price of things. So I recommend putting a restriction such as no using the items on others or sell them. Though I still think you should not have made the buying system. You can make it so he can sell his loot. And can only buy ingredients or common items. No magical items. He needs to craft them himself or buy them in the world.

You can actually making the selling feature part of the rouge class. The higher the level in rouge the more he can sell and the higher in bard the more he can buy. Or you just make it sell and buy are related to rouge. The biggest selling point on your story, for me at least, is that the MC works for his powers. So being given a convenient way to get items sort of ruins that. You can remove restrictions like making items costing EXP, since those are just there to limit power creeps. But just pulling a sell/buy system out of nowhere is just making it more convenient for not reason.

I really think you should not have added a way to get items. At least make it only common items. Don’t upgrade it. Otherwise it would vastly reduce the usefulness of the artificer class. Plus it’s best you keep the story as realist as possible. It would be super convenient to just sell off loot. Otherwise he would have to use rouge or bard skills to sell the shit he gets. I recommend making the seeping of loot a temporary feature. Up to you though.