Great Writing! The first chapter has a very strong hook into the story! Do keep it up with your writing! Highly recommended to everyone. Nice.

Thanks for the feedback, will definitely adjust them later.

Great, another webnovel **** up. Guess I better stick to reading top 20 novels in the future. Since any other novels on this site are prone to being dropped.

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Thanks for the catch.

I like how different this novel's setting is as compared to other novels I have read. There's some English issues that can be improved like sentence structure and grammer, but overall it is smooth to read.

The sentence structure and grammer can be improved, but the point the author is trying to convey is still easily understandable. I like that the author's description of the setting is detailed.

Can't deny that he is named Percy because of Percy Jackson lol. But I changed the last name for my novel, not as smooth sounding though haha.

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O.O didn't even know there was the term, parallel sentencing lol. English is hard. Haha

Thanks for the heads up. Tenses had always been my biggest nemesis haha.

Thanks for the heads up. Tenses had always been my biggest nemesis haha.

A lesson needs to be taught =D

Thank you very much for your kind support!

Thank you very much for your kind support!

Thank you very much for your kind support!

Interesting start as of chapter one, it seems to be about magical girls. The writing is good enough that I can read it smoothly and understand the point the author is trying to convey. Good Job!

Review as of Chapter 10. I like how the system has a personality, and the description of the MC, Maria is clear and lets you understand her personality and thoughts well. The English usage is also good enough that I can read and understand the story without having to guess the meaning the author is trying to convey. Overall good job!

Great writing! It feels comparable to some of the paperback novels I read in the past. (Nowadays I'm just a web novel junkie.) The characters are filled with urgency from the get-go and with character. The setting is also well described and paints a clear picture in my mind. Adding this to my library, and will catch up later when more chapters are in =D

The writing is great and draws me into the story very well. The characters' speeches are to the point and with character. The world the author is brewing seems to be huge with tons of room for expansion from the get-go. Great job!