Hole Training, if you know what i mean? ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)

your grammar and POV are all over the place, I dont even know who is speaking who and what is happening.

the feelings i get when reading this chapter, is when the first ragnarok server was out and people were strong if you are wearing a smile mask.

why do not revive your past gf yet?? just saying

you not getting tabithas twin sister?? i think she is a saint on germa or something

you should go to teaching feeling world next and save sylvie

you really need a new name for sasuko because its kinda ruining the imersion

Lol Haru arrived

is it fgo abigail williams?

pls change the sister to brother....you keep using the wrong grammar when describing the gender of your characters

pls change the brothers into siblings instead

no more lily? i though you would adopt her too or something like that

did your lili ever left the soma family yet? you know removing the falna and going to other gods

i kinda like this story very much if not for throwing away a certain heroine like trash and giving her away just like that kinda turn me off and im kinda like whats the purpose of developing her when you are just gonna throw her like that?

no charm stats?

why is he hiding his status as gandalfr? just saying because she always sing the song about them

u should make it blunt mastery instead so it can power up other blunt weapons

is it possible for you to continue this story? i really like the way you made the harry potter story and how funny you make it and i always read it again and again and it always make me laugh just saying i enjoy this story making it my favorite from all other stories i read

hate to say this but shinra tensei is a push skill not pull....watch the battle scene where pain destroy konoha

can u atleast make a scenario where he has gone near a church? not just throw him like a animal to be slaughtered