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It was good at the start but when the ocean arc started it becomes repetitive and there is not that much risk that would cost the mc so much rather he overcome the trials easily. The other characters lack realistic outlook for example one of the character who is called king of the ship which has more power than mc in business sector. He would be a good antagonist as the mc destroys everything he has thinking that he would yield you should made a twist by making the opposition swirl into madness not fearing to loss everything at the cost of the mc's life. Because the king of the ship builds his own kingdom by his hands which makes him both ambitious and decisive. It was good while it last but nevertheless dull. A novel should have a good pacing in strength and the plot should proceed the same way and humor should be part plus character development if you decide that only the mc is strong put drama to novel like making him see the money is superficial in relationship give him setback make learn from mistake and try to do his best. The balance between risk and consequence should always be there and do not make it easy for the mc make him sweat blood and tears to have a fulfilling reward to the readers. Do not put words that would invalidate the system like for example the mc cannot do what the turtle do because they have difference in body structure but clearly it says that shared attribute so that makes him superhuman already but at the consequence of not controlling the power like for example he murdered someone accidentally or by his anger he almost hurt his love ones making him decide to find balance and use his strength when necessary. There so much more dude you should have use politics as deterrence to mc by making him an enemy of one of the government bigshot due opposite interests. In my suggestion the ocean arc messed up allot it would be better if phenomenon causes all creatures to mutate and the world salvaging the whole thing giving a new beginning to the story.
Bob is a good name
Elijah means Yahweh is my Lord
Amazing biblical verse about praying to God your godly desires.
His body should be invincible and cannot use his high level skills due to lack of divine energy. In cultivation you enhance both soul and body that is the reason why low level cultivator cannot do harm to a level higher than him/her they elevate their level of existence. I think you can explain in a way that he cannot use the emperor's body because the soul is not strong enough to handle it like a child wearing a divine grade armor. You cannot use it because of the gap between soul and body their strength must be equal to use the full potential of the body. Just trying to help
nice one
This is the most awesome WH40K fanfic I have read. In comparison to others yours are way better not boring and entertaining.
there is actually one fanfic here about Itachi but sadly the author stopped.