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timepiece9418dCommentedIt's interesting I don't hate it has potential yielding eye which critique at this moment would be his relationship with Karama and the fact karma is women now I also don't care for gender bent characters from the original but I will wait to pass judgment on that until I get further along. I wish Naruto and Karama's relationship was more friendly than what you have. closer to the real thing. They should be partners friends brothers. But so far it is too soon to make any real judgment calls
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sounds like alchemy.
"But for the start, I can grant you the ability to change the elemental composition of things and even living beings, including yourself. And do not worry, changing the composition won't kill you. I will make sure it does not happen." - timepiece9428dCommented
I wish you'd stop breaking the fourth wall it's like the main character is explaining to the reader and it's not good It breaks the flow of the story. And personally just ruins it for me I like to see the main character make decisions without explaining them or going into details about um I like to find out later in the story why what the story was about what the decision he made. Hope this helps hope it makes sense I just don't know how to explain it very well just when you break the fourth wall and have your main character break story that's why I can put it to talk to the reader it just ruins it breaks the flow of the story you can't really enjoy the story because he's not really Doing anything but explaining to the reader instead of pushing forward in the story or moving forward in the story it's like taking a giant pause And then going somewhere else and it just doesn't go well
Then I had thought would some of the designs in the fortress be liable. I knew I wouldn't have to worry about it collapsing on its own weight as some of the information in the fortress told me of machines capable of preventing that. - timepiece9429dCommented
what is M.phill?
"Ahem! So class, Tom moved towards the board and wrote down his name and his qualifications for all to see as he faced the students again,"as you all can see,I am a Passoit of Oxford university,I have done my PhD in genetics and My M.Phil is in A number of subjects one of which is enough for me to teach you the subjects of Nutrition and Basic autonomy" Tom finished in one and go - timepiece9429dCommented
what is pasiot?
"Ahem! So class, Tom moved towards the board and wrote down his name and his qualifications for all to see as he faced the students again,"as you all can see,I am a Passoit of Oxford university,I have done my PhD in genetics and My M.Phil is in A number of subjects one of which is enough for me to teach you the subjects of Nutrition and Basic autonomy" Tom finished in one and go - timepiece941mthReplied to timepiece94Ch 25 any ideas for worlds
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Hey I was arrested I'm at the Police station come and help me sort this out.
"Hey Jojo, congrats man! You got your next case in a week." Kang took the phone from Jenny and wished Jojo. - timepiece941mthCommented
pack members
The wolves didn't follow them because they didn't have any energy left. When the reinforcements arrived, they saw the condition their fellow clan members were in. - timepiece941mthReplied to Sanjay_K_L
thanks I was confused.
"Calm down, Alex. We must first look into it," Jojo looked at the information given to him by the employee. - timepiece941mthCommented
who is jessy?
"Calm down, Alex. We must first look into it," Jojo looked at the information given to him by the employee. - timepiece941mthCommented
what is his aspect again? I took a break and just picked it up again.
His experience crystallized into a great skill for prolonged battles. - timepiece941mthCommented
silver Tongue sounds better.
Mastery level - Basic.] - timepiece941mthCommentedCh 6 The life of an immortal
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very clear the force showed him a vision of the Darkside of theforce.
"So you showed me the Dark Side. Were you interested to see what I would do?", I ask the Force and feel a slight vibration from it. It would seem, I'm right. The face of my wife pulled me back and I managed to regain my individuality. - timepiece941mthCommented
what is FGO?
1. Spicy Mapo Tofu (FGO) - timepiece941mthCommented
what are they talking about?
"While I do appreciate the merits, I am not looking to gain one of such huge importance so earlier." I replied and she sighed again. Placing her hands up in a placating manner, her shoulders slumped.