Yolo_Natss

Yeah, ‘did’ and ‘could’ instead of ‘do’ and ‘can’. Crazy

Wow so many typos in just one paragraph. My expectations got lowered before even beginning the story. Hopefully the story is good and grammar improve.

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How to begin? The story has potential but is bland and missing some spices. I have read until ch20 so idk what the story is afterwards. But until ch20 I wish the MC was the protagonist Raphaelle, he looks much more entertaining. The story with the current MC is boring. MC is a genius in term of magic but instead of capitalizing on that the story focus on his physical training ? The MC is almost emotionless and kind of robotic. We don’t know a lot about him, we don’t know much about what he thinks, what he likes, what are his aspirations or goals other than « I’ll die on 3-5 years, I have to become stronger ». He compare himself with the protagonist exclusively in physical strength ? Like, hello ?

First I can confirm it should be roar and not growl. Second, either use “assemble” or “come here” because both means the same thing in this context, I found it redundant using both.

You really put my thoughts in words but in a more gentle and rational way hahaha! I totally agree, this death was boring. A character death has to be believable and create emotions. Here it’s 100% just a fake death for plot purpose. As if author wanted the “difficulty” to be sky high for our MC but haven’t thought of a more plausible way in the ligne of “Ren died, that prove his task was really really hard, look he didn’t got it easy”. In my opinion this whole inferno arc was not that much necessary. And the tropes are very similar to the Monolith arc, alone infiltration/ fake death of Ren/ demon pledgers/ super duper dangerous mission with immense variables/ SS and S reinforcements that do the big work cuz you know Ren is very weak but he is the one that save the day in the end (or Kev). Anyway just one word boring.

I read the Author explanation in comments but we are just readers not inside of Author mind. During a reading and directly in the text we should have these explanations not off text and off story. It still feels far fetched and forced I remain doubtful but still supportive of this amazing story. I reacted with great vim because I never was this strongly in disagreement about something in this story as everything else was so perfectly mastered.

A few hours and already 5% ? That’s too fast. What about months of cultivation before a minor upgrade ? That means 20 days and he’ll be 100% in the core formation realm ? Bruuuh

Holy fricking nuggets!!!! I didn’t notice until now but the MC sure GUESSES a lot, like a looooooooooooooooot

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