Eclairs

So you mean to tell me, a old man far past his prime was able to not only toy with a superpowered Beast, who is not only faster, stronger and heavier but has lived and trained for more than 200 years. Moreover this old man isnt even a super individual just trained. Man you must be smoking something.

Isnt his brother beside him named Invincible?

Started great with compelling plot, but after conquest it started going downhill. Many factors like Seed of Life, Faith, Dragonborn, etc while addded new elements it still was jarring in the plot. End was even more unsatisfying, i get author wanted to end it, but if tou knew you couldn’t complete it then just leave it mysterious rather than jarring us with info that is generic.

Tough Meryn Trant was a joke, he was still a kings guard. And even the worst are still better than 99% of all Knight in the 7 kingdom.

Well from the story telling perspective, it will be very hard to distinguish among these two houses as both are fair, white hair people, making them black in the show HOD was a perfect decision, highlighting their differences. Tough, it is a shame when when looking through the book POV.

You have 6 days, not 6 months

It started excellently, but as story progressed so did the flow. Mc kills the Khal easily, get Valyrian weapon easily, has tome filled with magic, can gain experience and knowledge from drinking his victims blood, and is unnaturally devotion to Daenerys. The story is like a uninterrupted or unchallenged path of conquest but Mc already has everything he needed to do it, no growth, no struggle, not even a moment where we contemplate Mc brilliance which we see him lacking with every decision he makes.

Author is really trying hard to portt Mc like he is smartest guy in the room, but his actions tell otherwise. Claims to want to be outside the conflict but is the major spearhead leading rhe charge. Overall, his actions and plan are completely opposite of his goal and somehow his 15 years old dragon is larger than Balerion. Trying to put logix here is very hard to do, though i commend author for trying.

A well written Asoiaf Dance of the dragon fanfiction.

I’m done, simple twist i can try to ignore, but constantly changing the plots major points is too much. I get Asoiaf is a low Magical world but this is ridiculous. Jon leaving winterfell before getting Ghost, not taking any money with him, and there was a five year timeskip before that. If you wanted jon to leave why did he wait until he was 16, the age which in books he was already the Lord Commader of the night watch. Children of around 12 in books are said to be able to fight and win against trained knight. And this is not even the worst thing that is making me give up on reading this, Eddard is being shown as a person with unclear intentions, Mc just decides to gives his essence to a random girl he saved in the way. 2 lost Targaryen Sword are suddenly found, and was somehow buried in a completely unknown place by the heir who was supposed to treasure them, and moreover there is a storage bracelet as well. You cant create a more Gary Stu character than this, i have no doubt he will be able to marry daenerys and create his own kingdom simple by being lucky and being in the right place at the right time.