Chaptes feels bloated, main character is too op its boring, its one of those stories where lots of female characters fall for the mc but hes monogamous which is good, the problem is you already know nothings going to happen so the scenes where it shows those female chracter falling for the mc feels pointless and feels like uneeded filler

Agree with nyaruko nt* cr*sh is

Should've just stuck with haki and fleshed it out made your own interpretation of it instead of this mess of a devil fruit

So its a world with a good potential but has a cliched japanese MC with luck of cliched chinese cultivation MC

4cm circumference? his d**k is now a 10 inch pentel pen lol, you mean diameter right?

too much preaching

The MC not killing them was logical but him buying the egg isn't, he could've just taken it for luring deathclaws to them and gave some caps out of pity

Writing Quality: Ok Story Development: Too fast which makes the events weird and cringy Character: The power is interesting but the one weilding it is a retard. His first fight he forgot he has a blue petal(sheild) got shot in shoulder, his attack is just to throw the red petal(weapon) and forget about it *facepalm* Update Stability: Ok World Background: The usual Marvel fanfic world (MCU with X-men and Fantastic 4)