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I can't take this trash anymore and am so sorry I wasted power stones waiting for the writing to get better or more consistent. The author constantly forgets what happened even just a few chapters before. The main character has 5 years experience in the apocalypse and acquired unlimited guns? He will forget to use them for 40 chapters where they would have allowed him to not ALMOST DIE several times. eventually remember he has them and waste a 200 round box of heavy machine gun ammo on a scrub it would a literal finger flick to kill silently in a zombie apocalypse then let his friend run away to get reinforcements to come back and loot their base instructing his companions to let him go because who cares they are invincible. He comes back with strong help and the MC lets his weakest follower attack a much stronger enemy knowing he will splatter like an egg on a rock and just watches it happen. Follows that up with sending his second weakest follower to rescue the first idiot knowing HE will splatter like and egg as well instead of just using any of five so far introduced ways to almost instantly win on his own. This world had so much promise and I so desperately kept throwing good money after bad hoping the author would improve and it just keeps getting exponentially worse. The character keeps acting more and more out of his description as a coldblooded ruthless survivor from 5 years in the future. There is no bigger failure of a writer than not being consistent within the world you build. You can create your own world that runs on your own rules but you cant just change the rules every other chapter randomly for no discernable reason. There is no consistent rule or logic to this story, anything can happen at anytime for any reason then change back again just because. I WEEP for what this idea could have been if the author wasn't such carless trash who cant be bothered to remember what he wrote just from one chapter to the next.
The idea behind the story is really fascinating, but the execution is so off that it breaks you out of immersion constantly. The protagonist gets a 100k multiplier on stored items before the apocalypse but never thinks to use it to increase his funds by storing valuables like gold or new iPhones and taking them out to sell for more money? He has a month to prepare and doesn't think to go overseas to acquire weapons and ammo. He is supposed to have survived 5 years in the apacolips before returning but constantly gets distracted in the middle of combat by airing cool shiny new stuff. The main character acts like he has suffered a major head trauma causing erratic actions and wild charecter swings all the time for no reason. If the main character was not written so badly, this would be such a good story. Everything else is good, one example is the main charecter has enough food for 10 million lifetimes and risks his life in an avoidable fight for just a little more food but will walk away from an easier fight for a super rare valuable he has non of stored in the next scene. WHY!
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So for what I assume is a first try by a non native speaker or resident to write a story about America in English its not bad. I feel like it would be better set in the writers country and better researched about things the writer has no experience of such as guns. Honestly the weakest part of the story is bad charecter development and making up way to many things that even 10-15 min of research would show were ridiculous. I'm gonna drop it but I think the author could do better with more experience.
OK, the author really doesn't know anything about guns. Why has he written the main character be better at shooting than a special forces marksman but so inexperienced that he does not remember to reload a partial clip? ANY person who has played any game with guns learned this. Also, a desert eagle has a ferocious kick and if you tried to fire 15 rounds rapid fire you'd probably break your wrist if the gun didn't just fly out of your hand by round 3.
I have a real problem enjoying stories where the MC is mentally deficient yet presented as normal. If you are at a yard sale and someone offers you a solid gold statue weighing thousands of pounds at a price of any random 3 Pokémon cards. So you bring him 3 the first 3 you found on Craigslist. He goes "holographic mint 1st edition charizards!" and he gets really exited and loses his shit a little bit and shoves the gold at you. Then eagerly says "I'll buy everything you can bring me" you might take the deal but find it odd. If after sleeping on it and spending a couple days collecting more Pokémon cards you still go "He seemed very eager to give me a statue worth 3billion in gold for the first 3 Pokémon cards I picked up at the flea market for $20, well whatevrr!" You are a Forest Gump level individual at best. It works when plot armor is the foundation of the story, not so much when you are supposed to belive the protagonist is at least normal level intelligent. Any normal person will try and figure out why this individual values a seemingly common thing to such a degree. If someone knocked on your door and offered you a casheres check for 100million for your normal 3 bedroom houseright now, after accepting and cashng the check you would start to investigate why they would do something so seemingly stupid. This is the level of imbalance the first trade the MC makes and never bothers to go past "that was weird. Moving on!"