I really hope he achieves more this time around. Although it was an important plot point that pushed rudra to fight thor, etc, I always felt karna was done dirty and could've achieved way more

the info dump about Grace's mum felt a bit forced and probably would've been better revealed slowly through a few interactions.... that or a small flashback 🤔

overall, I like what you tried to do and the info given, but was a bit of a mess, leaving me confused (i.e. Why are we covering this? Who's perspective is this meant to be? why is this even relevant?). the order in which it was done and the pacing was off imo but the end wrapped it up and put most of what was read prior into context

I just don't see the value in these chapters! none of it is necessary and is actually really uninteresting to the point it's a waste to unlock.

I really don't get why he doesn't just sleep through a cycle

waste points unlocking these chapters as honestly some of the most boring chapters I've ever read

his likes and dislikes made me laugh

The thought process and entitlement today 🤷🏻‍♂️ how dare you be mean and not treat me like a lady whilst I act like a petty snake of a man 🤦🏻‍♂️

Well, this was good whilst it lasted and just decided to check for updates.... 🤷🏻‍♂️ author has obviously dropped it with French version chapters not corrected whilst starting a new novel. think I will skip his following work going forward

This reminds me of the dream sequence from the 2nd nightmare and not in a good way. Having a hard time reading this and resorted to skimming as fast as I could to get through these chapters.

I'm likely a million miles off but the thought that the 6 champions could be version's of sunny and co just hit me. Dread Lord > NephDevouring Beast > EffieUndying Slaughter > JetTorment > KaiSoul Stealer > SunnyMad Prince > Mord

it makes no sense for one paragraph kaiser says 'you should be dead' implicitly stating he knows the guys identity only to have the next few make out like he seems familiar 🧐

copy and pasted! hearing the same thing explained multiple times I'd annoying but this.... this is just lazy

the editing on these chapters is cheeks 😔 which is unfortunate because I feel the story has potential. Sentence structure and word choice is off and seems like a translation without a fluent English editor to help

Don't see how a quick and decisive ambush is a way to test your upper limits... especially when your not a assassin/theif/rogue type character 🤷🏻‍♂️

yeah OK 👍🏻 must be amazing where you come from, kids graduating 10 yrs early as standard. Intelligent young adults struggle with half what she is doing but sure 🥱

I was talking about taking them into the boss room 🤷🏻‍♂️ obviously if you need 'x' number of people to open doors, then people are required but like you said... they don't have to go in once opened

That very well might be true as I'm sure there are some children who are pretty advanced maturity/intelligence wise.... but these kids have it much better than the average working class by far. Those be massive silver spoons the kids in this story were raised with! This isn't even to mention what atrocious parents they have, allowing them access to a hyper realistic, hyper violent & explicit game that induces major trauma even to adults 🤷🏻‍♂️ On the whole I like the story and most characters obviously to get to this point by reading about the kids age after them doing stuff that sounds so off base just breaks the immersion.

again these are not 6yr old at all 🤦🏻‍♂️

and this kid was said to be only 6yrs old a few chaps back?! I hope it was a typo but 🤷🏻‍♂️ if not the author mustn't of ever interacted with young kids/pre teens/teens as this certainly wouldn't be the kind of thing they would say/think/do at all unless your taking late teens or young adults