For me, your novel is very good and detailed, but I think you could add more depth to the interactions between the various characters, making the characters look more alive. and his insight is too opportune in my opinion, he can understand martial arts without any foundation in martial arts. At least you have to make him have the basics, such as stacking martial arts books, to make better martial arts.

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maybe as you say, I don't understand the story but for the background it's ok bro thank you for replying

I can't say anything about your story, he was attacked by monsters several times and he didn't die?. Is it me or the story is lacking............................... .........................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................

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