i think you should look for an editor, the story was fun to read till now but reading it gave a headache.

i thought it was god devouring body not god slaying body?

i think you cant learn chidori if you dont have a lightning chakra nature?

: what happen to the memories of vampire overlord? is it all about cultivating ? no fighting? no offense but if there's a fighting experience in those memories how come tang san trash him?

yup, just do what you want, dont care about other people opinion, if they dont like what you write then they should stop reading your fanfic, there's some people there who support you in doing what you write . keep it up bro 👍

the cultivation level is trash.

some words are not in sync with previous chapter then all of a sudden they change back.

so using the perfect observation haki cost a lot of money? HAHAHAHA

its good really, but ypu didnt mention how he practice his chakra control or his percentage in his chakra control in his status panel, i think you should put it on his status panel and remember from the past chapter his chakra is on mid jonin level and after absorbing a little chakra from two tail his chakra level gone up to mid kage, i think in narutoverse when you suddenly gain massive chakra your overall control when weaken a lot or a bit and you should practice chakra control. anyway keep up the good work, really enjoying reading it.

yes it doesnt increase his mana regeneration but his mana pool will get bigger and he could use his skill more. also he could just meditate plus the skill meditation level up right so it should make regen a little faster, if not what the use of that skill leveling up if it didnt change a single thing right.

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well thanks for clearing it up for me and still waiting for more chaps. keep it up bro.

oh so all those memories of his 6 lives needed to be unlock ? to regain his experience on them?

so tenten is out of the team?

he had a whole 500 years worth of memories and experiece right? so he should know some training kr fighting style right? cause you mention in the past chapter that he was fighting those uninvited guest and the asura right? so what happen to those experience ?

you said "More chapter's tommorow" means bot just one so im gonna wait hehehe.

you cant use shadow clone if you chakra is only sat the level of student also shadow clone is a B rwnk not E, rank E is clone technique and it does not fight it just a clone.

the numbers also doesnt much to what it says previously like he should be level 10 but then it show his only level 9

i thought he already level up when he kill the bear? should he be level 7 when his done with the wolf?

why dont you add some mastery in those skill section? like low,mid,high,advance,expert,perpect and lastly profound?