Journal Day 128: "The Lord has graced us with its presence. Can this be a sign? Have our pleas been heard? Will the Lord give us just one more chapter or will it let us fend the wasteland on our own?" - Benedryl Cucumberpatch

The whispering part hits different when you change the age.

why does he sound like a 51 year old man trying to give me advice instead of like a 15 year old... Hey author, I think you messed up some numbers

Bootleg communist

Respect for the dedication. I'm happy that there are authors on this website who truly care about their story. I have not read a lot so I don't know what happens after. The only advice I have is that it's sometimes better to have a periode/chapter that is slower paced (or something like fillers), so that the readers can 'have a rest' and so that you can make a bigger connection with characters and readers. [It's still your book, you decide what happens in it. This was just some advice from a Tree ;) ] Keep this up 📖

Yust know that you're doing great. Keep this up and this novel will definitely hit the charts 👍

**: No hate towards the author. Almost every story has flaws so it's normal that this one also has them. I just wanted to point one of them out. Good luck with writing 👍

I feel like something needs to be pointed out. The location/background. Don't get me wrong, its not a bad location in general. It's just one of the worst locations/backgrounds you could have chosen for your kind of story. And don't compare this with 'Among Us', because there is a key difference between this story and 'Among us': the level of importance. This is a ship that would potentially determine the fate of humanity. Would you let someone, without a degree, in such a ship? Do you believe even for a second that the 'officers' on the ship have a single bit of authority, not being commanded by the headquarters on earth? Do you think that Neil Armstrong needed to pay for his food while he was on a mission? Would you not do as much psychological tests as humanly possible to make sure that everyone is in perfect condition (/have good characteristics for the job)? Would you not check/scan every 'corner' of the ship so nothing is wrong (for example, putting camera's everywhere)? It would've probably been a good story, but because of the location, almost everything sounds unrealistic and dumb.

This is not highschool, my dude. I don't want to hate, but this whole chapter is unrealistic and a cliché. This ship holds (a part of -> maybe there are other ships) the future of humanity. Thus the leaders of the world let... 1) ...capitalism 'in' the ship (imagine Neil Armstrong needing to pay for food while in the rocket). 2) ...a division be created between crew members. 3) ...psychological tests be a thing of the past. 4) ...someone WITHOUT A DEGREE ON THE SHIP, THAT DETERMINES THE FATE OF HUMANITY, THROUGH CONNECTIONS.

Fired because you were in the hospital? Mate, don't you have unions in your country?

Feels like a father berating his otaku son